for Alienated5/8/2004 c1 Edraith
There is so much truth in this. Actually, the tone and allegorical nature of it reminded me of Bunyan's "Pilgrim's Progress"... ;-) I love the rhyme scheme; I wonder what it would be like if you made the rhythm completely regular as well, but the poem is great as it stands.
There is so much truth in this. Actually, the tone and allegorical nature of it reminded me of Bunyan's "Pilgrim's Progress"... ;-) I love the rhyme scheme; I wonder what it would be like if you made the rhythm completely regular as well, but the poem is great as it stands.
4/7/2004 c1 E A Tetje
I like the message and the symbolism that you have used in this poem. Some how it doesn't quite seem to flow prperly though, but as I have no suggestions on how to change this (if it needs to be fixed... it's probably just me) I will simply say it is good!
I like the message and the symbolism that you have used in this poem. Some how it doesn't quite seem to flow prperly though, but as I have no suggestions on how to change this (if it needs to be fixed... it's probably just me) I will simply say it is good!
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