for Healing5/14/2004 c20 KrazyKarah
Eke. Alot of people in this story are messed up! Its great though. Thanks for checking out my story.
Eke. Alot of people in this story are messed up! Its great though. Thanks for checking out my story.
5/10/2004 c20 Amanda Michelle
Yeah that chapter was really short. LOL. i did enjoy it tho. I cant believe Kevin is doing that (somking joints, i mean). Somethin's wrong w/ him. Keep writing!
Yeah that chapter was really short. LOL. i did enjoy it tho. I cant believe Kevin is doing that (somking joints, i mean). Somethin's wrong w/ him. Keep writing!
5/10/2004 c20 bree
YAY! *i really like this story* YAY!
YAY! *i really like this story* YAY!
5/10/2004 c20 HarryPotterSNL
I can't believe Kevin was smoking! Wow, there's always something going wrong. Very good chapter! UPdate soon!
I can't believe Kevin was smoking! Wow, there's always something going wrong. Very good chapter! UPdate soon!
5/9/2004 c20 
7SaintEm0
I have a question. WHAT the fuck is with your chapter titles? there odd and usually mean the last word or sentence of the chapter. i hate it but besides that i like this story, just do one thing. dont kill anymore people
7SaintEm0I have a question. WHAT the fuck is with your chapter titles? there odd and usually mean the last word or sentence of the chapter. i hate it but besides that i like this story, just do one thing. dont kill anymore people
5/2/2004 c19 Kim
its really really great! keep writing plz plz plz u must. its getting better and better but i need another chap soon. glad u passed ur exams. now concentrate on writing the next chap for all of ur adoring fans! keep up the gr8 work!
its really really great! keep writing plz plz plz u must. its getting better and better but i need another chap soon. glad u passed ur exams. now concentrate on writing the next chap for all of ur adoring fans! keep up the gr8 work!
4/28/2004 c19 KrazyKarah
Kris thinks shes owes Madison and apology? ok. Great part! I love it!
check out my story if you want.
Kris thinks shes owes Madison and apology? ok. Great part! I love it!
check out my story if you want.
4/27/2004 c19 laura
congrats! still a little short i'd give u sum ideas but i ain't the most imaginative person in the world! keep writing, i'll keep reviewing even if it takes ages to update. xx
congrats! still a little short i'd give u sum ideas but i ain't the most imaginative person in the world! keep writing, i'll keep reviewing even if it takes ages to update. xx
4/25/2004 c3 57NeWriter
Hello. May I say something? I'm only a year younger than you and I just read till now... because I couldn't read more. Okay, I don't think it's mainly your fault but you shouldn't get just encouraged that by receiving 218 reviews this story is good. You know,I read every single review quickly and of 218 only 6 were constructive critism. By what the rest said, I don't think you got the message that for making a story good you don't have to have LOTS OF DRAMATIC EVENTS.
Maybe you should go and read other stories more; and try to think about the writer's style or way of introducing some things. Description. YOU NEED TONS OF IT. You can't just like say:
"Then I would be ready." Kris whispered before their lips met. Kris tangled her hands in Mike's spiky sandy brown hair. They continued to kiss not noticing the fact that the door had opened. There stood Tom shock written all over his face as he felt his heart shatter. 'I just wanted to love her and have her love me in return, but I guess I just wasn't good enough.'
That's first of all, chessy. Do you really think you would have thought like that when you are in a situation similar to that? Try to put yourself in the character's shoes or something. Try to describe the scene; image as if it were your bedroom. Try to introduce new feelings in different ways and make each character's action better. Overall, I think you should really consider about changing the plot of this story. Too many deaths or whatever isn't a good attraction if you want your fic to be good.
I've been here over a year now and at the beginning I was just like every other reviewer you have in here which lacked for language. I hope this really helps you and your story...
NeWriter.
57NeWriterHello. May I say something? I'm only a year younger than you and I just read till now... because I couldn't read more. Okay, I don't think it's mainly your fault but you shouldn't get just encouraged that by receiving 218 reviews this story is good. You know,I read every single review quickly and of 218 only 6 were constructive critism. By what the rest said, I don't think you got the message that for making a story good you don't have to have LOTS OF DRAMATIC EVENTS.
Maybe you should go and read other stories more; and try to think about the writer's style or way of introducing some things. Description. YOU NEED TONS OF IT. You can't just like say:
"Then I would be ready." Kris whispered before their lips met. Kris tangled her hands in Mike's spiky sandy brown hair. They continued to kiss not noticing the fact that the door had opened. There stood Tom shock written all over his face as he felt his heart shatter. 'I just wanted to love her and have her love me in return, but I guess I just wasn't good enough.'
That's first of all, chessy. Do you really think you would have thought like that when you are in a situation similar to that? Try to put yourself in the character's shoes or something. Try to describe the scene; image as if it were your bedroom. Try to introduce new feelings in different ways and make each character's action better. Overall, I think you should really consider about changing the plot of this story. Too many deaths or whatever isn't a good attraction if you want your fic to be good.
I've been here over a year now and at the beginning I was just like every other reviewer you have in here which lacked for language. I hope this really helps you and your story...
NeWriter.
4/25/2004 c7 26pneumothorax
i'm stopping reading. it seems to be a collection of false cliffhanger endings which do their best to change the plot as much of possible.
it doesn't flow very well - the reader gains very little insight into their feelings and their actions seems very unjust.
26pneumothoraxi'm stopping reading. it seems to be a collection of false cliffhanger endings which do their best to change the plot as much of possible.
it doesn't flow very well - the reader gains very little insight into their feelings and their actions seems very unjust.
4/25/2004 c3 pneumothorax
that seemed really random .. personally, I'd have thought that mike - if he were a person - would have waited longer. there didnt seem to be much feeling in that.
that seemed really random .. personally, I'd have thought that mike - if he were a person - would have waited longer. there didnt seem to be much feeling in that.
4/25/2004 c19 17Lady of romance world88
Hey! I feel sadly that Mike dead. Stupid idiot, Alex. I'm gladly that Tom helping Kris through her hard life when Mike was gone. I can't wait to hear the wedding of Madison and Kevin.
Hurry update soon
17Lady of romance world88Hey! I feel sadly that Mike dead. Stupid idiot, Alex. I'm gladly that Tom helping Kris through her hard life when Mike was gone. I can't wait to hear the wedding of Madison and Kevin.
Hurry update soon