for A River Of Innocence Lost4/25/2005 c27 becxfok01
This was a really painful but sweet story. Konah's feelings were especially well written. Keep up with writing!
This was a really painful but sweet story. Konah's feelings were especially well written. Keep up with writing!
4/16/2005 c27 IntentionallyLeftBlank
hey! wassup!
you did great with your plot and stuff... my only complaint (minor) is in the chapters... some seem to end at random or awkward places in the story... and those chapters that end in cliffhangers are like sledgehammers where a touch would suffice (subtlety or lack thereof)... but otherwise, awesome. And this subtlety thing applies only to the cliffhangers, as I thought K-dog's origin was well hinted at (as in, the progression of hints helped the flow... I don't always express myself very well).
keep it up, as it is very good.
hey! wassup!
you did great with your plot and stuff... my only complaint (minor) is in the chapters... some seem to end at random or awkward places in the story... and those chapters that end in cliffhangers are like sledgehammers where a touch would suffice (subtlety or lack thereof)... but otherwise, awesome. And this subtlety thing applies only to the cliffhangers, as I thought K-dog's origin was well hinted at (as in, the progression of hints helped the flow... I don't always express myself very well).
keep it up, as it is very good.
10/4/2004 c27 Ti
great story! I wonder if the sequel's already up... ^_^
-THE RANDOM CRITIC-
great story! I wonder if the sequel's already up... ^_^
-THE RANDOM CRITIC-
9/25/2004 c27 Seina
You had to give just that little taste of the next story to drive us all absolutely insane, didn't you? ~sigh~ I am so happy Saraia and Konah are living happily ever after (for a while, at least)! Your ever-faithful reader, Lady Merlin
You had to give just that little taste of the next story to drive us all absolutely insane, didn't you? ~sigh~ I am so happy Saraia and Konah are living happily ever after (for a while, at least)! Your ever-faithful reader, Lady Merlin
8/29/2004 c2 keep.breathing
Hey, this is good so far. Really well-written. I felt like I was reading an actual book. Also, this is random, but I think it would be cool if nobody had mirrors in their houses, just like in this story. That was a very cool idea. I would certainly make ME feel better. :) Anyway, I will totally keep reading this! Thanks for the review by the way. I have decided I will continue writing. The next chapter should be up in about a week. Keep up the great work! ~Abigail
Hey, this is good so far. Really well-written. I felt like I was reading an actual book. Also, this is random, but I think it would be cool if nobody had mirrors in their houses, just like in this story. That was a very cool idea. I would certainly make ME feel better. :) Anyway, I will totally keep reading this! Thanks for the review by the way. I have decided I will continue writing. The next chapter should be up in about a week. Keep up the great work! ~Abigail
8/26/2004 c26 
5aiur
AW they're so cute together! and YAY happy ending! big kudos for pulling that off. heh i had no idea you had completed this, actually. congrats! =) i'll see you in the sequel sometime i suppose this was a great read
~k8
5aiurAW they're so cute together! and YAY happy ending! big kudos for pulling that off. heh i had no idea you had completed this, actually. congrats! =) i'll see you in the sequel sometime i suppose this was a great read
~k8
8/26/2004 c26 passion101
Wow, this story is just...wow. I love it so much! and I very much appreciate that u don't go into detail of the rapings. I hate it when people go into detail. I mean, u leave enough information to know wut happened and that's great. I'd rather not get grossed out. Anyway, I'm glad i read this and can't wait till the ending!
Wow, this story is just...wow. I love it so much! and I very much appreciate that u don't go into detail of the rapings. I hate it when people go into detail. I mean, u leave enough information to know wut happened and that's great. I'd rather not get grossed out. Anyway, I'm glad i read this and can't wait till the ending!
8/26/2004 c26 4xTamx
OMG amazing story! The King is so sick and twisted and evil and argh i hate him lol. But I like Konah and Nial lots and I love Saraia for what she's gone through and I hope this turns out well. Im glad I found this story! Update asap
4xTamxOMG amazing story! The King is so sick and twisted and evil and argh i hate him lol. But I like Konah and Nial lots and I love Saraia for what she's gone through and I hope this turns out well. Im glad I found this story! Update asap
8/26/2004 c25 Watermelon Queen
hey - you are a very talented person. this story is pretty aaweosme. i just finished reading efverything up to chapter 26. make this last chapter (if it is) a long one. i dont think i can bear for it to end.
it pains me that things like this can happen, evne in a fictional world, but it is true. i love how you are giving Saraia hope. I love how you are saving her. most of all, I love how give her hope throughout this, and dont let her fall victim to death, pregnancy (though i suppose its too early to know, at this point.) or anything else. somehow you keep her safe, and i love it.
thank you.
Sam (aka, the watermelon queen)
hey - you are a very talented person. this story is pretty aaweosme. i just finished reading efverything up to chapter 26. make this last chapter (if it is) a long one. i dont think i can bear for it to end.
it pains me that things like this can happen, evne in a fictional world, but it is true. i love how you are giving Saraia hope. I love how you are saving her. most of all, I love how give her hope throughout this, and dont let her fall victim to death, pregnancy (though i suppose its too early to know, at this point.) or anything else. somehow you keep her safe, and i love it.
thank you.
Sam (aka, the watermelon queen)
8/26/2004 c26 3Desert Illusion
YAY! You've updated! Oh finally! Anyways, these were good chapters. I can't wait to see how the neding will be...good perhaps, right? (It better be good!) lol! Update soon!
3Desert IllusionYAY! You've updated! Oh finally! Anyways, these were good chapters. I can't wait to see how the neding will be...good perhaps, right? (It better be good!) lol! Update soon!
7/22/2004 c24 1Killer Tofu
Pretty graphic for a PG-13 fic, but its good. You havent updated in a while tho so I dont know if you're gonna let it hang there. You readers need closure!
1Killer TofuPretty graphic for a PG-13 fic, but its good. You havent updated in a while tho so I dont know if you're gonna let it hang there. You readers need closure!
6/20/2004 c24 Seina
Ah! You're totally killing me! How long is Saraia going to be mad at Konah? You can't possibly end the story with them like this. Can you? please please please don't. That would be a terrible thing to do. really truly horribly terribly terrible. ~Gryphon
Ah! You're totally killing me! How long is Saraia going to be mad at Konah? You can't possibly end the story with them like this. Can you? please please please don't. That would be a terrible thing to do. really truly horribly terribly terrible. ~Gryphon
6/19/2004 c23 17Lady of romance world88
I'm surprised that Konah is the king's son. Why does he left Konah and his mother? Can you explain more about them? Poor Niah. Poor Liana who go back with her aunt, Sarsha with her mother. How dare the king don't care about his family? Poor Saraia. I hope she can speak again and will realize Konah is not same as his father. Hurry update soon
17Lady of romance world88I'm surprised that Konah is the king's son. Why does he left Konah and his mother? Can you explain more about them? Poor Niah. Poor Liana who go back with her aunt, Sarsha with her mother. How dare the king don't care about his family? Poor Saraia. I hope she can speak again and will realize Konah is not same as his father. Hurry update soon
6/16/2004 c23 2That'sNotMe
Wow! ::tear:: Wow. That's pretty much all I can think to say except: WRITE A NEW CHAPTER NOW! Please... oh my gosh... That was so sad. Wow. ::sigh:: oh well, I'll let you go write now.
Fi
2That'sNotMeWow! ::tear:: Wow. That's pretty much all I can think to say except: WRITE A NEW CHAPTER NOW! Please... oh my gosh... That was so sad. Wow. ::sigh:: oh well, I'll let you go write now.
Fi
6/15/2004 c23 Seina
YAY! You wrote more. I am so happy. I want to know when Saraia and Konah will make up (because they are going to, right?). you must must must must must write more soon. Please? ~Gryphon
YAY! You wrote more. I am so happy. I want to know when Saraia and Konah will make up (because they are going to, right?). you must must must must must write more soon. Please? ~Gryphon