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12/13/2009 c1 151ForeverBehindTheImpression
Okay, minus the odd mistake, I LOVED IT!

Its very dramatic, though, personally, I thought you could've dragged it on a little longer... Though, maybe it doesnt seem quite long enough because of the different formating of no gaps between lines. It seems like the beginning of something bigger, or the end of a story not told. I really like that mysterious kind of aspect about it, like why exactly it was she was trying to kill herself, what he did to her.

1/14/2004 c1 1Harsh
thank god she didn't kill herself! well maybe not god... thank the guy, he actually called... that's a first, the guy never calls! i dunno what i'm talkin' about.
that was really depressing at the beginning... but the ending matched...
i thought she had already swallowed the pills... and i had a romeo and juliet moment (the new one with claire and leo, i guess its not new anymore... i,m getting old!) and i was gonna be like 'no!' but that didn't happen so thats good
i'm babbling
anyways good job!
happy writing (and i mean happy... it'll make you feel better)

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