for Moon Healing4/3/2004 c1 
30light of middle earth
Nice! Like this a lot. Words are appropriate, images are good... perhaps not enough pain! lol joking... For a title... hm, always the hardest part... cheezy options- moon star, sides of the moon More meaningful- light resurected, shade of hope? Anyway it is hard to find one and these are pretty awful lol. I really like this, well done, thanks for your review,
McD
30light of middle earthNice! Like this a lot. Words are appropriate, images are good... perhaps not enough pain! lol joking... For a title... hm, always the hardest part... cheezy options- moon star, sides of the moon More meaningful- light resurected, shade of hope? Anyway it is hard to find one and these are pretty awful lol. I really like this, well done, thanks for your review,
McD
3/23/2004 c1 84Escapist
I thought your pename was glitterjewele for some crazy reason, maybe because I was just reading some of her stuff and didn't acknowledge when I clicked over to your page. So, for a little while I was confused. I couldn't understand why you would give yourself serious reviews. Ha. And speaking of ha's, that mayonnaise thing at the end of your bio cracked me up.
And with that mess said: This is a beautiful poem. The whole thing (and maybe it's just your writing style) just flows so softly. It's breath taking. I love the lines: "Beneath a pale river, realities speak to reality/
Pessimists are humbled, as you render beauty to the stars." It makes me crumble.
Absolutely Gorgeous.
84EscapistI thought your pename was glitterjewele for some crazy reason, maybe because I was just reading some of her stuff and didn't acknowledge when I clicked over to your page. So, for a little while I was confused. I couldn't understand why you would give yourself serious reviews. Ha. And speaking of ha's, that mayonnaise thing at the end of your bio cracked me up.
And with that mess said: This is a beautiful poem. The whole thing (and maybe it's just your writing style) just flows so softly. It's breath taking. I love the lines: "Beneath a pale river, realities speak to reality/
Pessimists are humbled, as you render beauty to the stars." It makes me crumble.
Absolutely Gorgeous.
1/24/2004 c1 15fluffy gizmo
I love everything about this except maybe the title. It's as iff half the words have just upped and left because they know they cant compete with the rest letting the others shine so uch brighter (confused u yet?). it really is one of those poems that uses not much in the way of words but its beauty trancends letters into a message straight across ur soul (i feeling v.v.v.poetic right now - sozzy, this is a v.v.v.v.v.v.silly review yes?)
in short - i love it!
15fluffy gizmoI love everything about this except maybe the title. It's as iff half the words have just upped and left because they know they cant compete with the rest letting the others shine so uch brighter (confused u yet?). it really is one of those poems that uses not much in the way of words but its beauty trancends letters into a message straight across ur soul (i feeling v.v.v.poetic right now - sozzy, this is a v.v.v.v.v.v.silly review yes?)
in short - i love it!
1/23/2004 c1 55Lellida
I dunno... I really think you described the moon to a T. Beautiful language and imagery here- just beautiful. I never thought of the moon as sort of a testament that life goes on and of the sun's death... very very intruiging poem. Magnificent.
55LellidaI dunno... I really think you described the moon to a T. Beautiful language and imagery here- just beautiful. I never thought of the moon as sort of a testament that life goes on and of the sun's death... very very intruiging poem. Magnificent.
1/5/2004 c1 Tinkerbell2000
hey, great poem! i really liked this one, though i can't come up with any constructive criticism. as for the title, i dont think its that bad. my proposition would be something like 'midnight sun' or 'sleepless orb' but i dont really like them myself, lol
~tinkerbell
hey, great poem! i really liked this one, though i can't come up with any constructive criticism. as for the title, i dont think its that bad. my proposition would be something like 'midnight sun' or 'sleepless orb' but i dont really like them myself, lol
~tinkerbell
12/17/2003 c1 8glitterjewele
lol aw, i like the title, what're you talking about 'bloody awful' title, psh. :P
very haunting, this one. actually it's an interesting half-and-half combination of the haunting aspect and a strange sort of hope/rebirth idea. quite difficult to achieve, bonus points for that. ;) it absolutely had the aura of an offering/tribute about it, which worked really, really well in my opinion - especially toward the end. i had a crowning favorite line in this one, it practically hypnotized me with its sheer brilliance and other incredible aspects:
enchanting the sun's death
truly transcendant line of poetry, the *sound* of it alone electrified my imagination into life, let alone everything else about it . . . definitely a "WOW" line there. my other favorites were "the light you cry," and "prove to them one more time" (great final line, ended it on a magical note). loved it, you're amazing (again, as always ;).
8glitterjewelelol aw, i like the title, what're you talking about 'bloody awful' title, psh. :P
very haunting, this one. actually it's an interesting half-and-half combination of the haunting aspect and a strange sort of hope/rebirth idea. quite difficult to achieve, bonus points for that. ;) it absolutely had the aura of an offering/tribute about it, which worked really, really well in my opinion - especially toward the end. i had a crowning favorite line in this one, it practically hypnotized me with its sheer brilliance and other incredible aspects:
enchanting the sun's death
truly transcendant line of poetry, the *sound* of it alone electrified my imagination into life, let alone everything else about it . . . definitely a "WOW" line there. my other favorites were "the light you cry," and "prove to them one more time" (great final line, ended it on a magical note). loved it, you're amazing (again, as always ;).
12/13/2003 c1 JackKarson
I love your use of adjectives, and you use a poetic tone, unlike most people. You should use more imagry, similies, etc, but otherwise I really like your poem.
I love your use of adjectives, and you use a poetic tone, unlike most people. You should use more imagry, similies, etc, but otherwise I really like your poem.
12/13/2003 c1 Yaaru
Another wonderful piece! How do you do it? *sigh* this actually describes my feelings about the moon quite accurately...I've never been able to write anything *specifically* about it however (my stuff ends up being abstracts about people etc), and you did a lovely job. I repeat: How do you do it? ^_^
Another wonderful piece! How do you do it? *sigh* this actually describes my feelings about the moon quite accurately...I've never been able to write anything *specifically* about it however (my stuff ends up being abstracts about people etc), and you did a lovely job. I repeat: How do you do it? ^_^
12/10/2003 c1 53Lidless Eye
Awesome poem about the moon... it really make such a small thing feel much more powerful. Great job on the description; it is excellent.
~Lidless Eye
53Lidless EyeAwesome poem about the moon... it really make such a small thing feel much more powerful. Great job on the description; it is excellent.
~Lidless Eye
12/6/2003 c1 92Celestial Sailor
Gees, is there any way NOT to piss you off? If there is, please e-mail me. I'm kidding! ... Hope you don't get pissed off.
Now, what's wrong with the title Moon Healing? I think it is soothing and tranquil with no need for a change, and definately suits the vibes of the poem.
I am confused by the tautology, 'realities speak to reality'. Perhaps you mean to infer a paradox or conundrum.. but I am genuinely confused.
Ha! Another who loves the moon.. hmm.. I shall have to advise the Sailors and Dreamers to free up some more space in the Celestial Skies because it's becoming crowded with all these talented authors around.
Please do continue writing, but don't forget there is no need for defensive view of life, trust people more and have forbearance. Please don't get angry at me for being honest and direct, I'm simply trying to help.. in my own silly way :P
-Celestial Sailor
92Celestial SailorGees, is there any way NOT to piss you off? If there is, please e-mail me. I'm kidding! ... Hope you don't get pissed off.
Now, what's wrong with the title Moon Healing? I think it is soothing and tranquil with no need for a change, and definately suits the vibes of the poem.
I am confused by the tautology, 'realities speak to reality'. Perhaps you mean to infer a paradox or conundrum.. but I am genuinely confused.
Ha! Another who loves the moon.. hmm.. I shall have to advise the Sailors and Dreamers to free up some more space in the Celestial Skies because it's becoming crowded with all these talented authors around.
Please do continue writing, but don't forget there is no need for defensive view of life, trust people more and have forbearance. Please don't get angry at me for being honest and direct, I'm simply trying to help.. in my own silly way :P
-Celestial Sailor
12/5/2003 c1 106cosmo-queen
Beautiful imagery, wonderfully woven words. Don't really have a suggestion for an alternate title, I like the current one. Either way, great work, keep it up :)
*cosmo-queen*
106cosmo-queenBeautiful imagery, wonderfully woven words. Don't really have a suggestion for an alternate title, I like the current one. Either way, great work, keep it up :)
*cosmo-queen*
12/4/2003 c1 53Artemis Astralstar
you can always try...
Brilliant 'try' i loved it, captured the essence (or at least the closest i've seen so far) in the first stanza. i absolutely love the line, "clouds' seductive haven", there is something so powerful in them for me, wonderful imagery.
well done! keep it up!
53Artemis Astralstaryou can always try...
Brilliant 'try' i loved it, captured the essence (or at least the closest i've seen so far) in the first stanza. i absolutely love the line, "clouds' seductive haven", there is something so powerful in them for me, wonderful imagery.
well done! keep it up!
12/4/2003 c1 6The simplest sign of life
I like it. As to the title... I agree that it needs a change. But I'm not sure what to.
Keep writing!
~Wingwind
6The simplest sign of lifeI like it. As to the title... I agree that it needs a change. But I'm not sure what to.
Keep writing!
~Wingwind
12/4/2003 c1 acccountkiller
wow..*speechless* *jaw drops*...this is amazing! I have an undying passion for the moon ever since i first saw it and this is so...gorgeous...words cant describe perfection..
Enchanting the suns death
You are proof that lifes a miracle
Evidence to the cure of blindness
Everyday, someone is resuscitated in your reflection
And leans on the everything you are
Relying on your perfection to get them through
*swoons* truly perfect..thnx for ur reviews, means a ton...and I am terribly honored...wow...this is on my faves...*sob*..absoltuetly beautiful! Love, Mia
wow..*speechless* *jaw drops*...this is amazing! I have an undying passion for the moon ever since i first saw it and this is so...gorgeous...words cant describe perfection..
Enchanting the suns death
You are proof that lifes a miracle
Evidence to the cure of blindness
Everyday, someone is resuscitated in your reflection
And leans on the everything you are
Relying on your perfection to get them through
*swoons* truly perfect..thnx for ur reviews, means a ton...and I am terribly honored...wow...this is on my faves...*sob*..absoltuetly beautiful! Love, Mia