for Ignored and other haikus3/8/2005 c1 
2Ian Valeth
I liked the first one better, it seemed to imply hope, the second version implied stuborness on the part of the "fly". I think the idea of hope is much more effective.
2Ian ValethI liked the first one better, it seemed to imply hope, the second version implied stuborness on the part of the "fly". I think the idea of hope is much more effective.
12/20/2004 c6 16amethystdawn
Very poetic. *applauds* Even your author's note is poetic.^_~ And this is so true. Guilt is overwhelming. You are so good at this. You have to post more. ^_^
PS: Sorry for not posting all of the chapters of the old Frozen Heart, but it's because I was thinking of editing them and changing some. Anyway, if you have the time or if you're bored, can you please check it out?
16amethystdawnVery poetic. *applauds* Even your author's note is poetic.^_~ And this is so true. Guilt is overwhelming. You are so good at this. You have to post more. ^_^
PS: Sorry for not posting all of the chapters of the old Frozen Heart, but it's because I was thinking of editing them and changing some. Anyway, if you have the time or if you're bored, can you please check it out?
12/13/2004 c5 amethystdawn
I am proud of you! ^_^ It's very poetic. Abstract in a way, but I understand it. Can it be the return of a lover? The fulfillment of a promise? Hm...
Keep posting and updating!
I am proud of you! ^_^ It's very poetic. Abstract in a way, but I understand it. Can it be the return of a lover? The fulfillment of a promise? Hm...
Keep posting and updating!
12/13/2004 c4 amethystdawn
Jez-Arinn! Girl, this is such a huge achievement! I mean how many poems/haikus get 45 REVIEWERS? (plus me, which makes it 46...) I haven't been here for such a long time! I've missed you! Sometimes I visit this part but then I don't see anything new so I thought that you didn't post anything. I didn't know you updated this! ^_^ Anyway, back to the review. Let's see... It's nice, direct, and so real. I mean, who does want to be disappointed, right? Hope you keep on posting more poems. You're really good at them! ^_^
PS: If you have some time, can you please check out Frozen Heart? I placed it back and I posted the first three chapters 'cause I'm planning, actually still thinking if I should change the course of the old story. I'm not forcing you though. Anyway, bye.
Jez-Arinn! Girl, this is such a huge achievement! I mean how many poems/haikus get 45 REVIEWERS? (plus me, which makes it 46...) I haven't been here for such a long time! I've missed you! Sometimes I visit this part but then I don't see anything new so I thought that you didn't post anything. I didn't know you updated this! ^_^ Anyway, back to the review. Let's see... It's nice, direct, and so real. I mean, who does want to be disappointed, right? Hope you keep on posting more poems. You're really good at them! ^_^
PS: If you have some time, can you please check out Frozen Heart? I placed it back and I posted the first three chapters 'cause I'm planning, actually still thinking if I should change the course of the old story. I'm not forcing you though. Anyway, bye.
7/24/2004 c5 Delete Name
I didn't get this one.
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Can I add your poems and stuff to my webpage? (Just say yes or no in my guestbook or e-mail please)
I didn't get this one.
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Can I add your poems and stuff to my webpage? (Just say yes or no in my guestbook or e-mail please)
7/24/2004 c2 Delete Name
Aw, how thoughtful! People must really respect you now, you'll make Haiku's after them, lol. Just kidding ^.^;
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6/10
Aw, how thoughtful! People must really respect you now, you'll make Haiku's after them, lol. Just kidding ^.^;
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6/10
7/24/2004 c1 Delete Name
It's supposed to fit the scheme of 5-7-5, and Haiku's are generally nature-based or spiritual poems.
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They're not supposed to rhyme either, but lots of people rhyme them so they don't matter.
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Nice job! Especially for a first time.
It's supposed to fit the scheme of 5-7-5, and Haiku's are generally nature-based or spiritual poems.
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They're not supposed to rhyme either, but lots of people rhyme them so they don't matter.
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Nice job! Especially for a first time.
7/9/2004 c6 148JJR Meerraf
Very true, very good (haven't I said that before about something... oh well :), it's true)
Great job my friend!
148JJR MeerrafVery true, very good (haven't I said that before about something... oh well :), it's true)
Great job my friend!
7/8/2004 c1 139Raven-ember
I don't really like haikus, i think they're too short but this is one of the few that i like! So good job!
139Raven-emberI don't really like haikus, i think they're too short but this is one of the few that i like! So good job!
6/15/2004 c5 82pippin tomson
I alwayts find Haiku's very hard to understand and always have to read them more than once. I really like the begging because I think a lot of people will understand that. It would be a brilliant piece to read aloud because it has been writtne in a way you can make alot of it. Very simple, and once I got my head round it, good work!
pippin
p.s. The poem of mine you didn't understand, every second line was supposed to be a knew character speaking. Don't know if that makes it any easier for you to read?
82pippin tomsonI alwayts find Haiku's very hard to understand and always have to read them more than once. I really like the begging because I think a lot of people will understand that. It would be a brilliant piece to read aloud because it has been writtne in a way you can make alot of it. Very simple, and once I got my head round it, good work!
pippin
p.s. The poem of mine you didn't understand, every second line was supposed to be a knew character speaking. Don't know if that makes it any easier for you to read?
6/10/2004 c4 76CoolBeans18s
Great piece. I can't say that I enjoy being disapointed either! :/
~ CoolBeans18s
76CoolBeans18sGreat piece. I can't say that I enjoy being disapointed either! :/
~ CoolBeans18s
6/10/2004 c3 CoolBeans18s
Changes are hard, as you've expressed so very well in this piece! Wonderfully done!
~ CoolBeans18s
Changes are hard, as you've expressed so very well in this piece! Wonderfully done!
~ CoolBeans18s
5/27/2004 c1 3MissLeigh021
I like the alternative better, that's just my opinion though. You write well.
3MissLeigh021I like the alternative better, that's just my opinion though. You write well.