for InspireD by JusT ONe EMail9/1/2012 c1 Guest
I understand what you went through, it can be hard. As for the story, it was touching but the sentences were a bit sloppy. They sort of slid into each other so that it messed with the pacing (which was a tad to fast). Nice job with the sum trick
I understand what you went through, it can be hard. As for the story, it was touching but the sentences were a bit sloppy. They sort of slid into each other so that it messed with the pacing (which was a tad to fast). Nice job with the sum trick
8/10/2005 c1 brak
you know, you are a really thoughtful person, i'm really glad you wrote that, it really makes me think about how i deal with my grades. lol, with your one story i think i might be trying my best in school!
you know, you are a really thoughtful person, i'm really glad you wrote that, it really makes me think about how i deal with my grades. lol, with your one story i think i might be trying my best in school!
12/5/2003 c1 
8Meldon
The poor spelling at the intro for this essay gives me a bad first impression of your writing. The intro and title are the wrapping paper for your essay. No matter how good the essay is under the intro, the wrapping paper gives you an impression on what is underneath. As for the piece itself, it is strangely well-written as opposed to the intro. I would also suggest not using ALL CAPITALS. That is what people use in IMs or note-writing. Use italics or stronger words to convey emphasis. This will give your work a look of a professional, or at least a serious writer. The essay itself is very good. I enjoyed it.
8MeldonThe poor spelling at the intro for this essay gives me a bad first impression of your writing. The intro and title are the wrapping paper for your essay. No matter how good the essay is under the intro, the wrapping paper gives you an impression on what is underneath. As for the piece itself, it is strangely well-written as opposed to the intro. I would also suggest not using ALL CAPITALS. That is what people use in IMs or note-writing. Use italics or stronger words to convey emphasis. This will give your work a look of a professional, or at least a serious writer. The essay itself is very good. I enjoyed it.