for The Sailing Ship5/19/2020 c1 Guest
nice
nice
11/3/2004 c1 
1JemG
Hey! You reviewed for me, so I wanted to check out your stuff and reply at the same time. I am soso glad that you read my story and left a message. I was a little worried about that piece, because, I mean, the idea is used so often; a women getting beaten; so I pretend that I was conentrating on my writing instead. Anyway, glad you stopped to review.
This piece is good. I like a few of your metaphors/similes a lot. I'm a sucker for new ways of saying things. I had a teacher who just completely turned me off from any cliches, which is definitely a good thing. But yeah, it was nice. I blue story, I rank them in colours by how they sound, I know weird. But anyway, it's just that it was fresh and cold and just the words you use give it a blue tone. Okay that's it. I'm done. For this one anyway. Must go to class now but I will check out more of your stuff later.
1JemGHey! You reviewed for me, so I wanted to check out your stuff and reply at the same time. I am soso glad that you read my story and left a message. I was a little worried about that piece, because, I mean, the idea is used so often; a women getting beaten; so I pretend that I was conentrating on my writing instead. Anyway, glad you stopped to review.
This piece is good. I like a few of your metaphors/similes a lot. I'm a sucker for new ways of saying things. I had a teacher who just completely turned me off from any cliches, which is definitely a good thing. But yeah, it was nice. I blue story, I rank them in colours by how they sound, I know weird. But anyway, it's just that it was fresh and cold and just the words you use give it a blue tone. Okay that's it. I'm done. For this one anyway. Must go to class now but I will check out more of your stuff later.
8/12/2004 c1 2Jennifer H. Westall
Wow, this is great! What a serene picture. You paint with words so beautifully!
2Jennifer H. WestallWow, this is great! What a serene picture. You paint with words so beautifully!
4/8/2004 c1 Gilded Muse
Poetic prose. Is there anything better? I love how descriptive it is without actually describing anything. Just a feeling. It leaves you sort of, not breathless but in awe.
Poetic prose. Is there anything better? I love how descriptive it is without actually describing anything. Just a feeling. It leaves you sort of, not breathless but in awe.
12/7/2003 c1 6Nickety
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"The light breeze seemed to sweep down from the sky and caress the sails and ropes of the ship, strumming them gently, like the strings of a harp."
I play harp (well, Chinese harp), so that was a total unintentional shout-out to me. So, go you!
Very well done. I applaud you.
6NicketyE!
"The light breeze seemed to sweep down from the sky and caress the sails and ropes of the ship, strumming them gently, like the strings of a harp."
I play harp (well, Chinese harp), so that was a total unintentional shout-out to me. So, go you!
Very well done. I applaud you.
12/5/2003 c1 Wrong Name Tag
Very pretty vignette. I wish there was more to it; someting... something that I can't quite please. Yet, I like it how it is. Quite pretty and a nice flow to it. I love how you set the man up at the front of the boat in that second paragraph, that was wonderful, was was the line "He was swimming in rainbows, immersed in stars", which I loved. Great job.
Kudos and daisies.
-Jess
Very pretty vignette. I wish there was more to it; someting... something that I can't quite please. Yet, I like it how it is. Quite pretty and a nice flow to it. I love how you set the man up at the front of the boat in that second paragraph, that was wonderful, was was the line "He was swimming in rainbows, immersed in stars", which I loved. Great job.
Kudos and daisies.
-Jess