for Untitled3/23/2005 c1 
70this is britt
That was glorious. and now all feels right with the world, which it never does. excellent job.
70this is brittThat was glorious. and now all feels right with the world, which it never does. excellent job.
2/10/2004 c1 7water sprite
The end of this poem really made it worthwhile to read, great work :) Its a great way to express the monotonous beat life can take on sometimes, and the change in thought at the end is really interesting.
7water spriteThe end of this poem really made it worthwhile to read, great work :) Its a great way to express the monotonous beat life can take on sometimes, and the change in thought at the end is really interesting.
12/6/2003 c1 84Escapist
Okay...wow. Where do I begin?
The flow of this is magnificent, certainly not what I expected. When I started reading the first couple of lines I accurately recall myself thinking, "OK, this person wrote it just to pass the time. Not a poet, they said." But, by the time I finished reading it, my jaw was noticeably dropped.
This is wonderfully constructed. It goes through a very average every day routine and thoughts but then you throw in something that makes the poem what it is.
"He pulls out of gun
I think of fear
He puts it to his head
I think of calling the police
I hear the gun go off
I think of what I should have done"
And then there's a beautiful ending.
Truly a commendable job.
84EscapistOkay...wow. Where do I begin?
The flow of this is magnificent, certainly not what I expected. When I started reading the first couple of lines I accurately recall myself thinking, "OK, this person wrote it just to pass the time. Not a poet, they said." But, by the time I finished reading it, my jaw was noticeably dropped.
This is wonderfully constructed. It goes through a very average every day routine and thoughts but then you throw in something that makes the poem what it is.
"He pulls out of gun
I think of fear
He puts it to his head
I think of calling the police
I hear the gun go off
I think of what I should have done"
And then there's a beautiful ending.
Truly a commendable job.
12/6/2003 c1 Chambered emotions
I think a lot too :) haha, yeah well anyways, this is really good ! Yes, you are by all means a poet. It doesn't have to rhyme, you don;t have to be published...you just have to write all your emotions through all your sences adding one sence, and that is your mind...good job
I think a lot too :) haha, yeah well anyways, this is really good ! Yes, you are by all means a poet. It doesn't have to rhyme, you don;t have to be published...you just have to write all your emotions through all your sences adding one sence, and that is your mind...good job