for As The Blood Drips12/10/2005 c1 
83White is a Sin
oh that was brilliant!
i like it!
hey i find your user name FUNNY
then again i laugh when people die...
83White is a Sinoh that was brilliant!
i like it!
hey i find your user name FUNNY
then again i laugh when people die...
11/28/2004 c1 44The Assassin's Shadow
love...entrancing isn't it. Do people get into that mess so they can hurt? Perhaps. I liked the poem.
44The Assassin's Shadowlove...entrancing isn't it. Do people get into that mess so they can hurt? Perhaps. I liked the poem.
6/14/2004 c1 Dwyer
That was really good. And it rhymed too, even better. I can't rhyme for shit, so good job.
That was really good. And it rhymed too, even better. I can't rhyme for shit, so good job.
2/3/2004 c1 53Impressionist
it's funny how blood is such a strong substance for writers. I love it...and sometimes rely on it to make a good story.
however...I think the use of blood in this piece is a bit abused. when people think of the subject they automatically think "deep, dark, and mostly good". Don't try to use that to manipulate your readers. The dripping of blood really didn't hold a whole lot of relevance for me...but that's just my opinion. other than all that, it's not bad at all.
53Impressionistit's funny how blood is such a strong substance for writers. I love it...and sometimes rely on it to make a good story.
however...I think the use of blood in this piece is a bit abused. when people think of the subject they automatically think "deep, dark, and mostly good". Don't try to use that to manipulate your readers. The dripping of blood really didn't hold a whole lot of relevance for me...but that's just my opinion. other than all that, it's not bad at all.
1/21/2004 c1 40Jareth the Monk
This reminds me of a girlfriend I had who I discovered was cutting herself (she had a argumentive relationship with her mother). I didn't know what to do for her except accept that she was emotionally fragile and to help her when I could. As far as I know, she doesn't do it anymore, but still no one deserves pain, from others or from themselves.
I guess this seems to deviate from the classic sense of a review, but it does show that good writing makes you think, sometimes about things you'd rather forget. Basically a good poem that wants to stick to four beats. It almost looks as if the thought started out as prose (maybe a germ for a short story?) but it was discovered that some lines could easily rhyme, so the story was abandoned for poem form. My theory is hard to prove (and may be incorrect), but I'm talking now about the writer's subconscious awareness of rhythm and how some entire sentences tend to flow off the tongue even when spoken without any attempt to rhyme at all.
Just don't be so sad!
40Jareth the MonkThis reminds me of a girlfriend I had who I discovered was cutting herself (she had a argumentive relationship with her mother). I didn't know what to do for her except accept that she was emotionally fragile and to help her when I could. As far as I know, she doesn't do it anymore, but still no one deserves pain, from others or from themselves.
I guess this seems to deviate from the classic sense of a review, but it does show that good writing makes you think, sometimes about things you'd rather forget. Basically a good poem that wants to stick to four beats. It almost looks as if the thought started out as prose (maybe a germ for a short story?) but it was discovered that some lines could easily rhyme, so the story was abandoned for poem form. My theory is hard to prove (and may be incorrect), but I'm talking now about the writer's subconscious awareness of rhythm and how some entire sentences tend to flow off the tongue even when spoken without any attempt to rhyme at all.
Just don't be so sad!
1/1/2004 c1 Arreis Kurai
it conveys such sadness but at the same time self worthlessness...(i think thats a word...)but your poem is written with emotion and it shows...i like it
~*Arries Kurai*~
it conveys such sadness but at the same time self worthlessness...(i think thats a word...)but your poem is written with emotion and it shows...i like it
~*Arries Kurai*~
12/23/2003 c1 41Razor Sharp Kisses
The emotions are beautifully strewn across the words, making it easy to read and easy for the reader to understand the point. I like this. The title is very poetic as well. Good job.
41Razor Sharp KissesThe emotions are beautifully strewn across the words, making it easy to read and easy for the reader to understand the point. I like this. The title is very poetic as well. Good job.
12/23/2003 c1 Lori Brennan
It almost sounds like someone being attacked. Then they accept it as what they deserve. "take a little bit of whats mine." Doesn't seem like a willing death. Very good work.
It almost sounds like someone being attacked. Then they accept it as what they deserve. "take a little bit of whats mine." Doesn't seem like a willing death. Very good work.