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2/12/2010 c1 23thinking.about.thinking
The last line is perfect. ^.^

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4/18/2004 c1 traylin
I'm sorry, I have no critique, just an understanding : )
3/10/2004 c1 52FAKEromances
oh. nice.
2/2/2004 c1 161chairmanmeow
Interesting way to put it. But I suppose I can't relate.
1/25/2004 c1 6Tatterdemalion
Wow. I love it - the writing flowed brilliantly without distracting you from the images (and what bitter and striking images they are!). I especially like the last line as it just seemed to capture that simplistic and powerless feel of the piece...
1/19/2004 c1 4darkperversion
i have been going through all of your stuff and i just keep getting more and mroe impressed. you are very talented
1/6/2004 c1 98YesIAmKanthak
Great wording. I love the middle line. Keep it up.
1/5/2004 c1 80Plato's Optic Runaway
oh...I hardly know what to say...(not that a lack of diction is an uncommon occurance with me). Damn. It's imposing, enchanting with its twisted complexity. Nice.
1/4/2004 c1 48Sun Chime
I love the metallic tang you've given to the poem, and the concept is really cool. It's actually true you know, being bound by commitment, that is. Great work, on the whole. And, btw, thanks for the review.
12/27/2003 c1 127godawful teen-angst poetry
Oh! How intriguing...I love love the last line. Metallic lust...what a concept to ponder.
~lyv
12/25/2003 c1 8glitterjewele
intriguing, and also disturbing ~ almost has that futuristic inhuman tinge to it, but not quite. interesting and original way to depict love [corrupted]. good parallel with 'metallic' and 'mechanical.' loved the "garden of the jailed lovers" line. awesome work. :)
12/25/2003 c1 49TiEka Koniku
interesting... but kinda true in a way. coolness. *IT*
12/24/2003 c1 168SeaVoi
That one is cool! SHAZAAM
12/23/2003 c1 Chocolate 4 You
Very well writen! Keep up the wonderful work! ^-~
12/22/2003 c1 123breakdown in the waiting room
A sexual panic attack.
-Jessica
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