11/22/2004 c11 Alicia
Hey, this is Alicia.

I like this story. I chose to read this one first because it was the longest.

There are some grammatical errors, though; would you like me to beta a chapter or two for you? I beta'd Erin's story once and she said I had good advice.

Your story idea is interesting, but the characterizations of Sara and Viktor could be developed more. Sara seems too naive to be believed.

I also, like another reviewer said, can't figure out the year. I know this is fantasy (because of the whole magic box thing) but it should still make historical sense if it takes place in this world.

I don't know much about Japan, but I do know that they have currency, so in the beginning where Sara pulls out a five dollar bill and has no idea what it is, wouldn't happen. I think she would already have some idea about American culture, and also, even though she tells Rebecca that she can take care of herself, I see no evidence of independence.

I really like Max. You've written him well. So far he seems like a believable person.

I'm confused about what's going on with the box and fate and stuff. But more chapters will explain that, I'm sure.

I'm gonna go look at your shorter stuff now. Email me, when you can.

9/20/2004 c10 6WickedIceMaiden
Lovely story so far. There are a few gramatical errors, but for the most part it is well written. Please update soon! (the mirror eyes thing is kinda creepy... but incredibly interesting, i simply cant wait to see wat you make of that.)

6/5/2004 c8 JY
I like this. I hope you update soon =)It's a great story so far. Good work.

3/30/2004 c6 Scorpio
Hey! I like ur story so far! It's interesting, so keep up the good work!

3/14/2004 c5 49Endowment's Seraph
well take it easy, no need to freak out. I was sota the same way about my first rape scene, it was like, "eh, how did this come up?' but ah well. This is really good, i hope you update soon.
~mel

2/9/2004 c4 Starlight16
Now that I think about it, it'd be pretty cool to see our Russian dude pick up Sara off of the streets and start being really cruel to her. But, Sara will change his cold heart! ^_^ Sorry, just trying ta help ya out.

1/24/2004 c3 1Pen Name27
I like this story. I can't wait to read more and see what happens when the two meet.

1/20/2004 c2 TC Stark
This was kinda short, don't cha think? I mean, compared to the 1st one. Oh well, when are we gonna meet this Russian dude. Oh I better just read on and find out, huh?