for My Path12/31/2003 c1 Traced In Green
Amazing! I loved it, it's just great. And by the way, it's Young'n'HopelessKid, I changed my pen name. Great job and keep writing!
luvs
JP
Amazing! I loved it, it's just great. And by the way, it's Young'n'HopelessKid, I changed my pen name. Great job and keep writing!
luvs
JP
12/23/2003 c1 
196Damaged
0_0 Ah! Anger! Darkness! ... ^_^ I love the poem! Your imagery was so vivid it was refreshing from some of the very reoccuring dull ones at fictionpress .. you're such a great author! Keep up the great work!
196Damaged0_0 Ah! Anger! Darkness! ... ^_^ I love the poem! Your imagery was so vivid it was refreshing from some of the very reoccuring dull ones at fictionpress .. you're such a great author! Keep up the great work!
12/23/2003 c1 132Sarah Parker
Wow... so dark. I LOVE IT. haha... *growl* I hate perfect people, who have everything go just right in their life and love every moment of living... blech.
I love these lines:
"I'd rather die on my knees laughing
With a cold, sinister gun pressed forcefully
To my accepting temple"
That "accepting temple"... awesome line. This poem kicks total ass. I love it. It's so angry.. and awesome.
132Sarah ParkerWow... so dark. I LOVE IT. haha... *growl* I hate perfect people, who have everything go just right in their life and love every moment of living... blech.
I love these lines:
"I'd rather die on my knees laughing
With a cold, sinister gun pressed forcefully
To my accepting temple"
That "accepting temple"... awesome line. This poem kicks total ass. I love it. It's so angry.. and awesome.
12/22/2003 c1 106cosmo-queen
Powerful poem. You have used some excellent metaphors that can be applied to a lot of people's lives. Keep writing :)
*cosmo-queen*
106cosmo-queenPowerful poem. You have used some excellent metaphors that can be applied to a lot of people's lives. Keep writing :)
*cosmo-queen*