for Serenity5/21/2004 c1 scissor sex
Pretty descriptions, though many of them are rather familiar. It seems a little vague. Many people think that vagueness gives a piece poetry, and so it does, but it also takes away sincerity.
Pretty descriptions, though many of them are rather familiar. It seems a little vague. Many people think that vagueness gives a piece poetry, and so it does, but it also takes away sincerity.
4/2/2004 c1 
47Dave500
Thanks for your review. I've always felt strongly that the israelites were not being treated farely by the UN. What the palestinian's have been doing to israel is no different than what the terrorist did to us in september 11th. If i blow a bus up that was filled with children than i would get the electic chair for sure. but when the palestinians blow a bus filled with children nothing is done. The fact is that it is murder no matter what race you are. Nothing justifys killing innocents. Besides i never heard of the israelies attacking palestinians like that. I cry JUSTICE FOR ISRAEL AND IT'S PEOPLE. once again thanks for your review.
47Dave500Thanks for your review. I've always felt strongly that the israelites were not being treated farely by the UN. What the palestinian's have been doing to israel is no different than what the terrorist did to us in september 11th. If i blow a bus up that was filled with children than i would get the electic chair for sure. but when the palestinians blow a bus filled with children nothing is done. The fact is that it is murder no matter what race you are. Nothing justifys killing innocents. Besides i never heard of the israelies attacking palestinians like that. I cry JUSTICE FOR ISRAEL AND IT'S PEOPLE. once again thanks for your review.
3/23/2004 c1 17the mouse that roared
Hi,
Just looking around and saw your name and I thought it was cool, so I decided to read some of your stuff. This is really good. I like it a lot. The description of Serenity and what it says about both of you is really good. I like the metaphors and imagery of the lake. Good job!
17the mouse that roaredHi,
Just looking around and saw your name and I thought it was cool, so I decided to read some of your stuff. This is really good. I like it a lot. The description of Serenity and what it says about both of you is really good. I like the metaphors and imagery of the lake. Good job!
1/14/2004 c1 36Psycho-kyugurl
This is so sweet...it brought teras to my eyes...it's nice to know you have a place you can seek for solace and comfort in darker time of the day, it is always assuring to know that you'll always have a friend to be there when you're down. This is great, thank you for sharing with us all.
36Psycho-kyugurlThis is so sweet...it brought teras to my eyes...it's nice to know you have a place you can seek for solace and comfort in darker time of the day, it is always assuring to know that you'll always have a friend to be there when you're down. This is great, thank you for sharing with us all.
1/13/2004 c1 2JupGrrl
I've read this already, and reading it again sent chills down my spine. You show so much maturity in your writing and such incredible use of imagery and wording. It's astounding.
2JupGrrlI've read this already, and reading it again sent chills down my spine. You show so much maturity in your writing and such incredible use of imagery and wording. It's astounding.
1/2/2004 c1 RoseMagenDavid
*secret smile*
Very good D very good...
Fav lines:
"They never saw her drawings, emotion and pain etched in charcoal, beauty etched in black. They never knew the songs in her head, the light in her eyes, the dark in her soul."
*secret smile*
Very good D very good...
Fav lines:
"They never saw her drawings, emotion and pain etched in charcoal, beauty etched in black. They never knew the songs in her head, the light in her eyes, the dark in her soul."
12/25/2003 c1 15Talia Veila
Wow... I love the words you used, I get a really vivid description. Great writing. And good luck on getting your novel published! If you just want to talk about writing, e-mail me. I'm always open for a chat.
15Talia VeilaWow... I love the words you used, I get a really vivid description. Great writing. And good luck on getting your novel published! If you just want to talk about writing, e-mail me. I'm always open for a chat.