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4/1/2004 c1 19SubliminalMsgs
i liked the meotion...but it didnt sound like a poem...it just sounded like sentences...not really poetic...
2/20/2004 c1 Stephen Fierce Publications
Very sad, but good. Please review my stuff.
2/9/2004 c1 Winter's Roar
Brilliant concept that is lost on so many, especially the male species. I will say in their defense though that often they have no idea that what they said was hurtful, so approaching him and just being blunt about it is often the easiest and most affective way of dealing with it.
I really like the way you broke up your lines, interesting. It was almost in a pattern, with your words almost rhyming, it was a great read. I also love the way you phrase 'meaningless'. Hats off to you on an extremely well written poem.
~ winter
1/22/2004 c1 TheRetardedMaleBtch
meaningless words are not so meaningless afterall.
but people can be deaf.
TheRetardedMaleB*tch
1/21/2004 c1 122Free-Writer
Wow...I like this. I can definately relate.
1/20/2004 c1 9Gethsemane of the Stream
Holy crap! That was so awesome!
I so hope whoever you are talking about listens to you.
Because i know that if you just tell them, it will work out.
However the outcome, it was meant to be.
Great poem!
(if you would like, check out some of my stuff later)
_
Will kill for money,
Gethsemane of the stream
1/17/2004 c1 24fearphobic
yeah i know wat u mean in this poem. "A few 'Meaningless' words from your lips could push someone, too far..." well i can really relate to these lines. well, i luv this poem!
1/14/2004 c1 10AngelaiR
I think mindtear was a bit harsh, I know that and decided to see how this poem was after I read your review to him on one of the poems I had just submitted a review to. I believe, yes, way, too, many, commas... I believe this poem could be much better without so many, though it is a choice of your own artistic ability and no one here is earning money for their works. But also, their is nothing wrong with a little suggestion. Keep writing.
1/11/2004 c1 21Perfectly-Insane33
I liked your poem, I sometimes feel like people say things that could push me too far. Once...Oh, I'm not even going to go into stories. I enjoyed the poem. Please check out mine, I wanna get some feedback! ^^;
1/10/2004 c1 9spikedhalosmary
o this is so horrible. be origional. you cant write at all. i hope you get some actual talent in a dumpster.if you cant give constructive criticizm then i dont think you should let someone know that they are horrible writers when they arent because somepeople who's writings i read that you have commented on are DAMN good,and you tell them some shit that they arent? when they are? that is complete bullshit. what the hell is the matter with you. dont review if you havent learned how!
1/10/2004 c1 151wastedlovexxx
I have more talent as a poet than you'll ever know.I have gotten many awards and I have met many famous poets because of this.I have yet to get a poem published but thats because my parents think i am too young.But i have alot more talent at writing than you just because you can critize doesnt mean you can write..
12/31/2003 c1 Traced In Green
I think we all can relate to this...Good job, I liked it a lot.
luvs
JP
12/27/2003 c1 MindTear
well, your reviewers have been too nice to you so far... i think people automatically put good poem and shit even when it's not. commas after every line, ruins, the flow, because, a comma, is seen, as a pause, and after, some ot those, lines, you don't, need, a comma. clich├ęs abound" "you're not a pretty picture yourself", "play me for a fool"... etc. Fix the capitalization on every beginning letter. that's not necessary. at least your title was okay.
~mindtear
p.s. sorry to be so brutal, but i'm sick of people telling each other that they write good poetry when it really sucks. and i'm also sick of people cluttering up the site with unfelt, plain, unoriginal poems.
12/26/2003 c1 8everlasting-euporia
i feel like youre angry with this person. this anger may or may not come from what this person has done to you. your words are straight and to the point. nice job
12/26/2003 c1 612simpleplan13
spelling... that no-ones gona tell me...gonna
yea i can realte... ppl cna be like that... great poem

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