4/9/2004 c9 10ment
::squeals:: you UPDATED YAY!
anyways that was the nicest chapter EVER! ryan was really really sweet! omg the got pushed in the lake...TOGETHER! hehe. anywayz i wonder how there little outing to town will be.
okay ryan is starting to bug me! i love him, but why did he have to like not speak to her the next day. i hope layne can figure out what's wrong with him.
oh and sydney and tyler 'oh so cute' lol!
update sooner puh-lease
::squeals:: you UPDATED YAY!
anyways that was the nicest chapter EVER! ryan was really really sweet! omg the got pushed in the lake...TOGETHER! hehe. anywayz i wonder how there little outing to town will be.
okay ryan is starting to bug me! i love him, but why did he have to like not speak to her the next day. i hope layne can figure out what's wrong with him.
oh and sydney and tyler 'oh so cute' lol!
update sooner puh-lease
4/6/2004 c9 Mina Carlisle
SO, Ryan is loosing up. Good, this chapter was fun to read and very well put together. Glad to see you updating this.
SO, Ryan is loosing up. Good, this chapter was fun to read and very well put together. Glad to see you updating this.
3/19/2004 c8 40Death Princess
OH this is so cool! i luv CIA camp stuff! so wassup wiv ryan? i do kindof understand him but uknow anywayz i g2g and eat byby and UPDATE SOON!
OH this is so cool! i luv CIA camp stuff! so wassup wiv ryan? i do kindof understand him but uknow anywayz i g2g and eat byby and UPDATE SOON!
2/23/2004 c8 1Steven Hildreth Jr
The story looks like it could have a lot of potential. It's not spy-kids martial art bullcrap-which earns it a lot of points (I noted that they were to receive firearms training.)
There are two things that need improvement, however: one, the chapters are WAY too short. Try to beef them up a bit; two, SLOW DOWN. I see that you've missed several words that meant to be in there. If you go back and reread what you wrote, I think you'll catch what I caught.
Fix those two things and you'll be back on track. The premise is good, and overall, it's an interesting story. Hope to see more of it.
P.S. Could you read and review my story The Shadows? Thank you. I hope you like it.
The story looks like it could have a lot of potential. It's not spy-kids martial art bullcrap-which earns it a lot of points (I noted that they were to receive firearms training.)
There are two things that need improvement, however: one, the chapters are WAY too short. Try to beef them up a bit; two, SLOW DOWN. I see that you've missed several words that meant to be in there. If you go back and reread what you wrote, I think you'll catch what I caught.
Fix those two things and you'll be back on track. The premise is good, and overall, it's an interesting story. Hope to see more of it.
P.S. Could you read and review my story The Shadows? Thank you. I hope you like it.
2/22/2004 c8 Lady Meriadoc
Another splendid chapters. Sorry it has taken so long, my harddrive crashed and it took a while to get it fixed and I would use the computers at work, but with filters and everything I could never check my email or get on this website or whatever. Great chapter, keep it up!
Another splendid chapters. Sorry it has taken so long, my harddrive crashed and it took a while to get it fixed and I would use the computers at work, but with filters and everything I could never check my email or get on this website or whatever. Great chapter, keep it up!
2/5/2004 c8 taft
very original and good story. so far you have told us about sydney and her partner, but it would be nice to hear about the other pairs and how they are ranked and how they are coping. e-mail when you update please, thanks
very original and good story. so far you have told us about sydney and her partner, but it would be nice to hear about the other pairs and how they are ranked and how they are coping. e-mail when you update please, thanks
2/5/2004 c1 taft
interesting start
interesting start
2/2/2004 c8 10ment
oh i really like your lil notes in italics at the end! hehe, so he didn't let her fall on purpose. good chappie!
update soon
oh i really like your lil notes in italics at the end! hehe, so he didn't let her fall on purpose. good chappie!
update soon
1/31/2004 c7 ment
this is really original and i can't wait for the update. ryan is very mysterious and i like him a lot...but my favourite character would have to be Sydney, LoL, her nickname for james is cute!
update soon please
this is really original and i can't wait for the update. ryan is very mysterious and i like him a lot...but my favourite character would have to be Sydney, LoL, her nickname for james is cute!
update soon please
1/31/2004 c4 ment
this story is getting better and better, i love the storyline and characters! i guess that Harrison was a lot like Ryan when Roberts first met him. it's kinda mean how they have to be ranked 1-14, cause of the wide age range...well i wanna know what happens so i gotta keep reading LoL!
this story is getting better and better, i love the storyline and characters! i guess that Harrison was a lot like Ryan when Roberts first met him. it's kinda mean how they have to be ranked 1-14, cause of the wide age range...well i wanna know what happens so i gotta keep reading LoL!
1/31/2004 c1 ment
if i had two CIA agents in my livingroom i would have totally freaked, she handled that well. LoL. sorry but i don't like authority people very much...hehe, even though my godfather's brother is one and i spend a lot of time with him...anywayz sorry for my ramblings, anyway i can't wait to see what's gonna happen!
LoL, i really liked the Heather character, very funny!
if i had two CIA agents in my livingroom i would have totally freaked, she handled that well. LoL. sorry but i don't like authority people very much...hehe, even though my godfather's brother is one and i spend a lot of time with him...anywayz sorry for my ramblings, anyway i can't wait to see what's gonna happen!
LoL, i really liked the Heather character, very funny!
1/31/2004 c7 16kaika switched
I love Ryan. His character is so well developed right now. I'm really liking this story, too. Keep writing!
I love Ryan. His character is so well developed right now. I'm really liking this story, too. Keep writing!
1/27/2004 c7 8Niccy
I like this chapter the best so far. =) I'm good at sprints but I pretty much suck at running cross-country or laps.. hehe. My friend though, is like Ryan. She is a freak at ALL sports, running, swimming, cross-country, soccer.. Hope Ryan trusts Layne soon. Good style of writing, update when you can~ d.fox
I like this chapter the best so far. =) I'm good at sprints but I pretty much suck at running cross-country or laps.. hehe. My friend though, is like Ryan. She is a freak at ALL sports, running, swimming, cross-country, soccer.. Hope Ryan trusts Layne soon. Good style of writing, update when you can~ d.fox