for Discontented4/24/2005 c18 
7Sunne
You've got some excellent writing. It flows nicely and is natural, as if it was a real conversation.
"I don’t know. I just think I pinned all my hopes on the wrong person. He was there and seemed like he was interested in me. But I guess he wasn’t." I can also totally relate to that quote...especially now with that one guy...
Anyways, excellent job, I've really been enjoying this.
~~Sunne~~
7SunneYou've got some excellent writing. It flows nicely and is natural, as if it was a real conversation.
"I don’t know. I just think I pinned all my hopes on the wrong person. He was there and seemed like he was interested in me. But I guess he wasn’t." I can also totally relate to that quote...especially now with that one guy...
Anyways, excellent job, I've really been enjoying this.
~~Sunne~~
4/23/2005 c10 IvyLilac
eep! What happens? ack! I'm just touturing myself, because the chapter is posted...
-clicks
eep! What happens? ack! I'm just touturing myself, because the chapter is posted...
-clicks
4/15/2005 c25 Amethyst
Awesome story! The ending was so realistic and I loved the insight. You're a great writer and I agree with the fact that you could do this professionally. You have immense talent. Great plotline, awesome characterization, great way to really tie things at the end. Your characters were so real and I could really relate to both Jake and Kat. I would have liked to get more involved in Jake's life too, but I guess that might have been even more chaotic and dramatic and that might have killed your story. Oh well. Thanks for the awesome fic. I really hope you write sometime soon.
Awesome story! The ending was so realistic and I loved the insight. You're a great writer and I agree with the fact that you could do this professionally. You have immense talent. Great plotline, awesome characterization, great way to really tie things at the end. Your characters were so real and I could really relate to both Jake and Kat. I would have liked to get more involved in Jake's life too, but I guess that might have been even more chaotic and dramatic and that might have killed your story. Oh well. Thanks for the awesome fic. I really hope you write sometime soon.
4/7/2005 c25 1Madcow13
Wow... I love the in-depth look into Kat's feelings. You have definitely managed to capture her emotions with tremmendous skill. I couldn't read chapter 15, to my annoyance, so I'll have to return to read that. However, the rest was written with subline skill. Great work again.
1Madcow13Wow... I love the in-depth look into Kat's feelings. You have definitely managed to capture her emotions with tremmendous skill. I couldn't read chapter 15, to my annoyance, so I'll have to return to read that. However, the rest was written with subline skill. Great work again.
3/31/2005 c25 6Justice Bana
Another Great story! Because I basically covered everything about how great your stories were in my review of Hello Kitty, I'm not going to continue forever. This story was really good though. Something I'm sure almost any teenager can relate too. Well donE~
6Justice BanaAnother Great story! Because I basically covered everything about how great your stories were in my review of Hello Kitty, I'm not going to continue forever. This story was really good though. Something I'm sure almost any teenager can relate too. Well donE~
3/29/2005 c1 kimber-lily bellemare
You know, i think that she is definitely struggling with a strange sort of attraction. He’s a bad boy rebel, what’s not to like? I know that i’m stating to oh-so-obvious, but in my mind, even if the out come wasn’t already foreshadowed, its quite clear that she kind of likes him. The guy that annoys you the most, and makes you feel like destroying something, and the guy who fascinates you to no end, is most likely the guy you'll fall for in the long run. I speak from personal experience... and i'm now married to the guy. Kat sounds like a younger version of me...down to a T... any way, I’ll cut my ramble short here. Great first chapter, keep up the good work!
Xoxox luv ya lots ~Kimber~
You know, i think that she is definitely struggling with a strange sort of attraction. He’s a bad boy rebel, what’s not to like? I know that i’m stating to oh-so-obvious, but in my mind, even if the out come wasn’t already foreshadowed, its quite clear that she kind of likes him. The guy that annoys you the most, and makes you feel like destroying something, and the guy who fascinates you to no end, is most likely the guy you'll fall for in the long run. I speak from personal experience... and i'm now married to the guy. Kat sounds like a younger version of me...down to a T... any way, I’ll cut my ramble short here. Great first chapter, keep up the good work!
Xoxox luv ya lots ~Kimber~
3/27/2005 c11 ReinaLucille
still enjoying it, though now im absolutely certain i've read it before, so kudos to you because i rarely read a ff fic more than once.. again, the last sentence of ch 11 should be i wishi the year were.. i know it sounds odd, but thats just the way it is.. bien, on to the next chapter!
still enjoying it, though now im absolutely certain i've read it before, so kudos to you because i rarely read a ff fic more than once.. again, the last sentence of ch 11 should be i wishi the year were.. i know it sounds odd, but thats just the way it is.. bien, on to the next chapter!
3/27/2005 c1 ReinaLucille
great first chapter.. i'm almost positive i've read this story before, but i'm reading it again.. one small correction.. your last sentence "i wish the year was over with" should be i wish the year were over with.. use of the subjunctive.. its my latest grammatical pet peeve.. no on to the next chapter!
great first chapter.. i'm almost positive i've read this story before, but i'm reading it again.. one small correction.. your last sentence "i wish the year was over with" should be i wish the year were over with.. use of the subjunctive.. its my latest grammatical pet peeve.. no on to the next chapter!
3/20/2005 c25 MZ PEACHESZZ
OMFG OMFG OMFG...I LOVE THIS FUCKIN STORY!okie ur other stories r good..great writing...great humor but this story is jus SO FRREAKIN AWESOME!i read a lot of stories on fictionpress and i sort out the best ones n Discontented is defintiy in there...ur a great writer with great inspiring stories but this story is very deep...i just LOve it!GREAT JOB AND KEEP IT UP! peayyce
OMFG OMFG OMFG...I LOVE THIS FUCKIN STORY!okie ur other stories r good..great writing...great humor but this story is jus SO FRREAKIN AWESOME!i read a lot of stories on fictionpress and i sort out the best ones n Discontented is defintiy in there...ur a great writer with great inspiring stories but this story is very deep...i just LOve it!GREAT JOB AND KEEP IT UP! peayyce
3/18/2005 c25 3fairy pwincess
the whole mum marrying baz and then becoming pregnant is really kinda disturbing but yeah this is really good. You really get deep into her feelings of what she is going through and how tough her life is. Fab.
TTFN ~*fairy pwincess*~
3fairy pwincessthe whole mum marrying baz and then becoming pregnant is really kinda disturbing but yeah this is really good. You really get deep into her feelings of what she is going through and how tough her life is. Fab.
TTFN ~*fairy pwincess*~
3/12/2005 c25 C. Regeling
omg...i really loved this story, it resembles one i wrote a couple weeks back but i havent uploaded it yet..great story that has helped me see some mistakes in my own writing...your stories are great..im utterly speechless, i dont know exactly what to say..except that your a great author, and awesome stories
omg...i really loved this story, it resembles one i wrote a couple weeks back but i havent uploaded it yet..great story that has helped me see some mistakes in my own writing...your stories are great..im utterly speechless, i dont know exactly what to say..except that your a great author, and awesome stories
2/25/2005 c25 KiraLyrin
Ekk! Omg! I love it so much, and you finished it, and its brilliant! I love Jake so much! You write him so brilliantly and he is amazing and so sweet!
Ekk! Omg! I love it so much, and you finished it, and its brilliant! I love Jake so much! You write him so brilliantly and he is amazing and so sweet!
2/9/2005 c25 40Moosher
Hey! That was a fantastic story I have to say! I can most definately relate to all her anger and frustration about being unheard, and feeling small seeking escapism..While she's figured everything out by the last chapter (which was amazing btw) I havent yet succeeded..prolly since i got no Jake of my own! Hmm..Can I borrow him? for eternity? Heh..Even thought Kat is the main character..I like Jake's personality more..Kat's too much like myself! =P N e ways! Thanx for this entertaining story and keep posting!=D..Meme
40MoosherHey! That was a fantastic story I have to say! I can most definately relate to all her anger and frustration about being unheard, and feeling small seeking escapism..While she's figured everything out by the last chapter (which was amazing btw) I havent yet succeeded..prolly since i got no Jake of my own! Hmm..Can I borrow him? for eternity? Heh..Even thought Kat is the main character..I like Jake's personality more..Kat's too much like myself! =P N e ways! Thanx for this entertaining story and keep posting!=D..Meme
1/21/2005 c25 demoness online
Wow! I loved it and I hope that you will do a sequel for it some day that would be realy great.
Wow! I loved it and I hope that you will do a sequel for it some day that would be realy great.