for Simple Truths2/16/2004 c1 
167PrincesKatrina
This is a great poem, i think it might be more powerful without rhyme thoug, it seems pushed and not true. Kepp writting.
167PrincesKatrinaThis is a great poem, i think it might be more powerful without rhyme thoug, it seems pushed and not true. Kepp writting.
2/15/2004 c1 90Identity
i love this. it captivated me from beginning to end. so sardonic. i just love it.
90Identityi love this. it captivated me from beginning to end. so sardonic. i just love it.
2/11/2004 c1 56Celest Covax
I liked that a lot. It had a very good rhyme scheme and a lot of truth to it. I esoecially like the ending. You have a gift darling, keep up with it.
56Celest CovaxI liked that a lot. It had a very good rhyme scheme and a lot of truth to it. I esoecially like the ending. You have a gift darling, keep up with it.
2/9/2004 c1 anon
I found these parts of your poem interesting:
Honest, Love everyone you see in plain sight, Appreciate all of life's simple pleasures, Laugh like you don't have a care in the world, Chose the right way- don't let your fists curl, He'll pick you up whenever you fall, Never once thinking that it could all end, lead a happy life...
Wouldn't you love to have all these things? Don't they sound good to you? Sure, I understand that there is a lot of pain and suffering and evil and sin in the world, but if everyone, including you, could strive to have these qualities, wouldn't the world start to become a better place? These are the things that there are no laws against, the things that are not evil and do not create evil.
Don't get me wrong, I know that the poem was really about the girl, who I agree should not have been going around showing off to the world how happy her life is, because she lacks compassion for others and obviously made you feel inferior.
All I'm saying is that if love is your attitude to life, then you'll broadcast love and help defeat all the bad things you mentioned in your poem, like all the cry's that "fade ignored into the night".
you can't defeat evil by defying good. two wrongs don't make a right.
I hope I've given you something to think about, and I hope I haven't sounded too 'know it all' beacause I really don't want to come across that way.
I found these parts of your poem interesting:
Honest, Love everyone you see in plain sight, Appreciate all of life's simple pleasures, Laugh like you don't have a care in the world, Chose the right way- don't let your fists curl, He'll pick you up whenever you fall, Never once thinking that it could all end, lead a happy life...
Wouldn't you love to have all these things? Don't they sound good to you? Sure, I understand that there is a lot of pain and suffering and evil and sin in the world, but if everyone, including you, could strive to have these qualities, wouldn't the world start to become a better place? These are the things that there are no laws against, the things that are not evil and do not create evil.
Don't get me wrong, I know that the poem was really about the girl, who I agree should not have been going around showing off to the world how happy her life is, because she lacks compassion for others and obviously made you feel inferior.
All I'm saying is that if love is your attitude to life, then you'll broadcast love and help defeat all the bad things you mentioned in your poem, like all the cry's that "fade ignored into the night".
you can't defeat evil by defying good. two wrongs don't make a right.
I hope I've given you something to think about, and I hope I haven't sounded too 'know it all' beacause I really don't want to come across that way.
1/30/2004 c1 1whitesmoke
very nice piece! u have great talent! keep up the good work, both here and at fanfiction!
cheers!
p.s. if u have time, feel free to go through some of my work!bye!
1whitesmokevery nice piece! u have great talent! keep up the good work, both here and at fanfiction!
cheers!
p.s. if u have time, feel free to go through some of my work!bye!
1/24/2004 c1 7ku
i thought this was gonna be about the difference between reality and perception but what i kinda got was the difference between reality and fantasy. but fantasy is a sort of perception. some people look at the world with a fantasy framework (eg those who read romance novels all the time and try hard to emulate it in their own lives). eh yeah...
7kui thought this was gonna be about the difference between reality and perception but what i kinda got was the difference between reality and fantasy. but fantasy is a sort of perception. some people look at the world with a fantasy framework (eg those who read romance novels all the time and try hard to emulate it in their own lives). eh yeah...
1/15/2004 c1 114Wren Craven
wow,...i really really enjoyed this piece...although i do think that sex is better within marriage, (not that i'm married and i would know, but my married friends DO know... *winks*) but anyway, this poem was really well written, the use of words was classy and far from boring (you don't rhyme together with forever...WAY too many people do that!) but wow, i was really impressed with the earthyness and reality of this poem. rock on, and by the way i read your bio...cool stuff. if you get the chance, please r+r my stuff. i know you already reviewed me once, but i am simply a review junkie.
chloe
114Wren Cravenwow,...i really really enjoyed this piece...although i do think that sex is better within marriage, (not that i'm married and i would know, but my married friends DO know... *winks*) but anyway, this poem was really well written, the use of words was classy and far from boring (you don't rhyme together with forever...WAY too many people do that!) but wow, i was really impressed with the earthyness and reality of this poem. rock on, and by the way i read your bio...cool stuff. if you get the chance, please r+r my stuff. i know you already reviewed me once, but i am simply a review junkie.
chloe