for The Love in Hate9/26/2005 c1 
5RedHairedWriter
So clear, and thought provoking almost crisp, I know the feeling. really cool.
5RedHairedWriterSo clear, and thought provoking almost crisp, I know the feeling. really cool.
3/4/2004 c1 acccountkiller
Wow...how come I missed this? So deep chica! Just...powerful! Beautiful, exquisite choice of words and such strong emotion coming from the poem! Wow...I admire you, his is F A N T A B U L O U S! Btw, :D, I'm spreading the word 'Lufians' put it on my profile, lol. Thnx for all your reviews, didnt notice them cos of stupid fictionpress going wild again! I am an atheist btw, a very strong believer in it but atheist's prayer was written when i was truly desperate..and it was more of the thing 'if there's someone out there'. i have faith in goodness, not god...complicated, lol. Anyway much love chica...this rocks! Love, Mia
Wow...how come I missed this? So deep chica! Just...powerful! Beautiful, exquisite choice of words and such strong emotion coming from the poem! Wow...I admire you, his is F A N T A B U L O U S! Btw, :D, I'm spreading the word 'Lufians' put it on my profile, lol. Thnx for all your reviews, didnt notice them cos of stupid fictionpress going wild again! I am an atheist btw, a very strong believer in it but atheist's prayer was written when i was truly desperate..and it was more of the thing 'if there's someone out there'. i have faith in goodness, not god...complicated, lol. Anyway much love chica...this rocks! Love, Mia
1/31/2004 c1 38Shadafakup
Hey old friend. Thanks for your review ages ago, and I apologize for taking so long to do something about it.
I don't know what to say about this girl. I'm just not in the right reviewing mind these days.
You know when I read those first few lines of your poetry - I was going like, omg this sounds so Shakespeare, but I like him and all, so that's a compliment I hope.
O, I loved this. I don't know how to say it, but there's just his underlying tone in the poetry that makes me almost want to cry.
Great choice of vocabulary here. Plus the image deserves one cookie too.
The way you phrased the words drew me into the piece. Very deep - I simply adored the way it flowed as well. Very smooth, very natural.
Loved the ending, somehow it looked as if someone was really falling. Very impactful, decidedly.
Ah, I don't know, this piece should have been easy to review, but my mind isn't working.
I shall go read some more of your stuff when that pink mash in my skull decides to reactivate itself.
Keep writing.
~Shadafakup
38ShadafakupHey old friend. Thanks for your review ages ago, and I apologize for taking so long to do something about it.
I don't know what to say about this girl. I'm just not in the right reviewing mind these days.
You know when I read those first few lines of your poetry - I was going like, omg this sounds so Shakespeare, but I like him and all, so that's a compliment I hope.
O, I loved this. I don't know how to say it, but there's just his underlying tone in the poetry that makes me almost want to cry.
Great choice of vocabulary here. Plus the image deserves one cookie too.
The way you phrased the words drew me into the piece. Very deep - I simply adored the way it flowed as well. Very smooth, very natural.
Loved the ending, somehow it looked as if someone was really falling. Very impactful, decidedly.
Ah, I don't know, this piece should have been easy to review, but my mind isn't working.
I shall go read some more of your stuff when that pink mash in my skull decides to reactivate itself.
Keep writing.
~Shadafakup
1/29/2004 c1 81daphnegray78
wow...that's all I can say. really insightful and something I can really relate to. God, I love this poem!
81daphnegray78wow...that's all I can say. really insightful and something I can really relate to. God, I love this poem!
1/19/2004 c1 281Devil6667
I like it. Definitely feelings i go through... a lot. Anyways, I really like the way you get it across to the reader what you feel, and your style of writing. r/r some of mine too.
281Devil6667I like it. Definitely feelings i go through... a lot. Anyways, I really like the way you get it across to the reader what you feel, and your style of writing. r/r some of mine too.
1/11/2004 c1 39Dahlia Wolffe
good poem. i can empathise, but not yet can i truly sympathise. but my characters can! please check my stories out, i also have nother penname OniKunoichi.
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39Dahlia Wolffegood poem. i can empathise, but not yet can i truly sympathise. but my characters can! please check my stories out, i also have nother penname OniKunoichi.
_angel
1/10/2004 c1 8glitterjewele
*gasp* an update. and a very intriguing one, at that. there are a few sections which are almost shakespearean-esque, like "your eyes, contract my prudent heart . . . but in your presence, on my lips, its truth does fade" ~ it just *screams* shakespearean sonnet at me (i'm jealous, i confess, though as consolation it's kind of awesome to have shakespeare reincarnated for a friend ;)). the theme rings true ~ nice depiction of it through this specific relationship. plenty of great images, my most favoritest ones were "on my lips, its truth does fade," "my hands seem all too willing to drag you within Death's abducting reach," "i wish your eyes would curl and die," and "when your lips seek mine to dance." really good piece, sorry it took me so long to review it! i shall be counting the days 'till the next post ;)
8glitterjewele*gasp* an update. and a very intriguing one, at that. there are a few sections which are almost shakespearean-esque, like "your eyes, contract my prudent heart . . . but in your presence, on my lips, its truth does fade" ~ it just *screams* shakespearean sonnet at me (i'm jealous, i confess, though as consolation it's kind of awesome to have shakespeare reincarnated for a friend ;)). the theme rings true ~ nice depiction of it through this specific relationship. plenty of great images, my most favoritest ones were "on my lips, its truth does fade," "my hands seem all too willing to drag you within Death's abducting reach," "i wish your eyes would curl and die," and "when your lips seek mine to dance." really good piece, sorry it took me so long to review it! i shall be counting the days 'till the next post ;)
1/9/2004 c1 53Lidless Eye
I've definitely been in this state before. I loved how you expressed it... the emotion is powerful. Awesome job on this, very superb writing.
~Lidless Eye
53Lidless EyeI've definitely been in this state before. I loved how you expressed it... the emotion is powerful. Awesome job on this, very superb writing.
~Lidless Eye
1/9/2004 c1 53Artemis Astralstar
firstly, you wrote im instead of I'm.
secondly, this poem's song is beautiful, the message so complex; the girl hates the man, but melts as he smiles, and hates him and herself for that... i know that situation allright...
the penultimate line was beautiful, encapsulating the thoughts of the woman. the word "fall" is perhaps superfluous in the last line, as the "aal over again" has enough presence to keep the ending heart breaking.
wonderful poem, well done.
53Artemis Astralstarfirstly, you wrote im instead of I'm.
secondly, this poem's song is beautiful, the message so complex; the girl hates the man, but melts as he smiles, and hates him and herself for that... i know that situation allright...
the penultimate line was beautiful, encapsulating the thoughts of the woman. the word "fall" is perhaps superfluous in the last line, as the "aal over again" has enough presence to keep the ending heart breaking.
wonderful poem, well done.