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23Hippos CAN Fly
That was kinky (MY definition of kinky is awesome). I really like the last four lines (would that be the last stanza?). I liked the rythm of your work and the depressingish form. It was really good ^_^
23Hippos CAN FlyThat was kinky (MY definition of kinky is awesome). I really like the last four lines (would that be the last stanza?). I liked the rythm of your work and the depressingish form. It was really good ^_^
2/2/2004 c1 123breakdown in the waiting room
I don't really like this one, though I do like the phrase "creative beauty." The rhyming just seemed to take the impact out of what you were saying.
-Jessica
123breakdown in the waiting roomI don't really like this one, though I do like the phrase "creative beauty." The rhyming just seemed to take the impact out of what you were saying.
-Jessica
2/1/2004 c1 6Medieval-Rogue
WOW WOW WOW! GREAT poem there, love it; all ... depressing and all! very good. VERY good, you might want to read my "Highway to Hell". it's saying the same kind of message. Peace.
6Medieval-RogueWOW WOW WOW! GREAT poem there, love it; all ... depressing and all! very good. VERY good, you might want to read my "Highway to Hell". it's saying the same kind of message. Peace.
1/29/2004 c1 5Blake Owen
Well constructed, written & observed. Great description with an always valid point to make.
Well Done
Keep Writing!
5Blake OwenWell constructed, written & observed. Great description with an always valid point to make.
Well Done
Keep Writing!