for Love1/20/2008 c25 
612simpleplan13
I love the stanza about not living, but existing without getting hurt... the whole ice imagery is awesome.. and I love how you dont mention its your heart until the end.
612simpleplan13I love the stanza about not living, but existing without getting hurt... the whole ice imagery is awesome.. and I love how you dont mention its your heart until the end.
11/17/2007 c24 simpleplan13
I like this.. its a great metaphor.. most of us have gone too slow and too fast and I like how the ending is hopeful.. kinda goldilocks.. too fast, too slow, just right lol
I like this.. its a great metaphor.. most of us have gone too slow and too fast and I like how the ending is hopeful.. kinda goldilocks.. too fast, too slow, just right lol
11/9/2007 c9 3Fan Fan
Geez...as I read this, I feel like reading the thoughts of the one a few of my poems were meant for...guilt, is the ingredient, misunderstanding, is the icing. However, I had to smile at the "Blink once" and "Blink twice" catch phrases :) lovely. I'll have to read the rest of the poems at a later time as I take a break for now. Keep up the good work
3Fan FanGeez...as I read this, I feel like reading the thoughts of the one a few of my poems were meant for...guilt, is the ingredient, misunderstanding, is the icing. However, I had to smile at the "Blink once" and "Blink twice" catch phrases :) lovely. I'll have to read the rest of the poems at a later time as I take a break for now. Keep up the good work
11/9/2007 c8 Fan Fan
What a contrast of perspective from the last poem -_^
Well done exchange of character, too bad it's just mis-interpreted as a game of flirtation :)
What a contrast of perspective from the last poem -_^
Well done exchange of character, too bad it's just mis-interpreted as a game of flirtation :)
11/9/2007 c7 Fan Fan
The anger ruined the flow :( However, I did enjoy the out of this world descriptions like the china doll covered in barbed wire and holds a machete hahaha good one
The anger ruined the flow :( However, I did enjoy the out of this world descriptions like the china doll covered in barbed wire and holds a machete hahaha good one
11/9/2007 c6 Fan Fan
hahaha on first look I thought you were describing a guy like me :P Then when it comes to a closer look argh I'm no teddy bear! Still, thank you for the smile :)
hahaha on first look I thought you were describing a guy like me :P Then when it comes to a closer look argh I'm no teddy bear! Still, thank you for the smile :)
11/9/2007 c5 Fan Fan
Oh the road doesn't have to be long and hard if you got a silver balloon to fly by ;) ...I couldn't help but stare mouth agape at the second half of the poem. Do I wish I never come to be in that position...but then, maybe I should always have raw roses prepared just to put that knife to use to rid the thorns that lays before the beautiful petals :) I do recognize that this poem is one of the few that very well portrays the expression of the many who have been frustrated by the veil of ignorance to see the 'one' behind them standing in their own shadow. I applaud your courage in those words so bluntly made from heart.
Oh the road doesn't have to be long and hard if you got a silver balloon to fly by ;) ...I couldn't help but stare mouth agape at the second half of the poem. Do I wish I never come to be in that position...but then, maybe I should always have raw roses prepared just to put that knife to use to rid the thorns that lays before the beautiful petals :) I do recognize that this poem is one of the few that very well portrays the expression of the many who have been frustrated by the veil of ignorance to see the 'one' behind them standing in their own shadow. I applaud your courage in those words so bluntly made from heart.
11/9/2007 c4 Fan Fan
Wow, the last two words completely added the color to this rhyme! I've never seen so few words(2!) used to effectively! Twisted turn, well done :)
Wow, the last two words completely added the color to this rhyme! I've never seen so few words(2!) used to effectively! Twisted turn, well done :)
11/9/2007 c3 Fan Fan
A strange unique rhyming of its own. Uniquely beautiful. This is an exotic one... :)
A strange unique rhyming of its own. Uniquely beautiful. This is an exotic one... :)
11/9/2007 c2 Fan Fan
Very insightful poem :) I was grinning reading how you compared his ego to whine of a mosquito hahaha thank you for the lovely work
Very insightful poem :) I was grinning reading how you compared his ego to whine of a mosquito hahaha thank you for the lovely work
3/9/2007 c22 612simpleplan13
daisy are my favorite flower.. lol...
I like the metaphor about the rose especially and the part about the lawnmower was great
612simpleplan13daisy are my favorite flower.. lol...
I like the metaphor about the rose especially and the part about the lawnmower was great
2/3/2007 c21 simpleplan13
I really like this.. its an interesting idea making something bad sound so good... and the imagery is beautiful
I really like this.. its an interesting idea making something bad sound so good... and the imagery is beautiful
1/3/2007 c20 simpleplan13
I like this.. the repition is nice and hte ending is very bittersweet... one thing i dont agree with is the second to last stanza... i think a good friend can tell you that, but thats just my opnion
I like this.. the repition is nice and hte ending is very bittersweet... one thing i dont agree with is the second to last stanza... i think a good friend can tell you that, but thats just my opnion