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3/1/2004 c1 16RuathaWehrling
Hey Jade!
Thanks for your review. I'll take a look at a couple of your poems in return. (Heck! If you could get through 22 chapters, I can at LEAST do that much!)
This is a very pretty poem. I like the archaic feel to it. Two questions, though:
"They light shine everlasting" - Do you mean "thy light"? If not, who/what does "they" depict? Also, should it not be "shines"?
"Thou art never dole" - Dole? Do you mean dull? Or what? I don't understand.
Take care!

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