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12/2/2004 c1 Andrew N
Troubled times are what make people end life in this way. It takes a real mature perosn to mold those troubled times into flowing words of awe... a black beauty. Again, you have a way with words. This art form is something that you can easily master, a gift, an Asher Lev gift.

Andrew N.Fellow sophmore of class '07
1/17/2004 c1 13through these jaded eyes
unlike ur otha reviewers, i don't know alot abt poetry, but i do like urs!
1/13/2004 c1 10Crelian2202
i would combine all day all night into one line (all day and night). But that is an authorical choice. I would also do freeze before warm, but keep these seperate. Once again an authorical choice. Great Job otherwise.
1/13/2004 c1 9Soul Rebel
I liked the comparitive phrases between 'blaze', 'icicle', 'warm', 'freeze'. That had a cool affect

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