for A Simple Song2/6/2004 c1 
31A Perfect Circle
Very powerful poem. The whole children aspect makes it even stronger, good work.
31A Perfect CircleVery powerful poem. The whole children aspect makes it even stronger, good work.
2/3/2004 c1 30light of middle earth
Sinister, meaningful and with a changing ryhme scheme that still somehow works- Love it! I like this a lot, starts off in an epic style then concentrates on the singular... this is really good. Perhaps "i ask you only this" instead of "i only ask you this"... i dunno it just seems to flow better to my mind- but that is personal preferance ;) Anyway well done, thx for your review- suicide... no but a good guess...
McD
30light of middle earthSinister, meaningful and with a changing ryhme scheme that still somehow works- Love it! I like this a lot, starts off in an epic style then concentrates on the singular... this is really good. Perhaps "i ask you only this" instead of "i only ask you this"... i dunno it just seems to flow better to my mind- but that is personal preferance ;) Anyway well done, thx for your review- suicide... no but a good guess...
McD
1/30/2004 c1 69til-iburnout aka Amanda Helton
First: *speechless look* this is beautiful. .. the way you written it, with the repetion of certain parts. .. wow. .
Second: Thank you for reviewing my poem "Dream" I do think I will have to try better to get as good as you.
Anyway keep writing,
Maddy
69til-iburnout aka Amanda HeltonFirst: *speechless look* this is beautiful. .. the way you written it, with the repetion of certain parts. .. wow. .
Second: Thank you for reviewing my poem "Dream" I do think I will have to try better to get as good as you.
Anyway keep writing,
Maddy
1/22/2004 c1 70Knavish Fiend
This is quite amazing. Plain and simple. You used repatition to it's greatest extent. Wonderful craftman's ship of this poem.
70Knavish FiendThis is quite amazing. Plain and simple. You used repatition to it's greatest extent. Wonderful craftman's ship of this poem.
1/16/2004 c1 148JJR Meerraf
Really cool, I really liked it. Linkin Park is one of the best places for inspiration too :-). Great work!
148JJR MeerrafReally cool, I really liked it. Linkin Park is one of the best places for inspiration too :-). Great work!
1/16/2004 c1 45flowerthief
Usually I don't like poems that rhyme because some people try to force them and then it just doesn't seem as good. I love this poem though, it's all connected. It's awesome.
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AC
45flowerthiefUsually I don't like poems that rhyme because some people try to force them and then it just doesn't seem as good. I love this poem though, it's all connected. It's awesome.
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AC