
6/7/2004 c1 LifeUnlived
Wow, very… mysterious to put it plainly. This is very well done. I’d like to invite you to a writing forum. I hope you enjoy the community and share some of your interesting works.
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Wow, very… mysterious to put it plainly. This is very well done. I’d like to invite you to a writing forum. I hope you enjoy the community and share some of your interesting works.
http:/ucps.proboards30.com/
5/8/2004 c1
16Dream and Write
Well done. Keep up the good storylines. I love the character interaction. This is very well done. I’d like to invite you to a writing forum. I hope you enjoy the community and share some of your interesting works.
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Well done. Keep up the good storylines. I love the character interaction. This is very well done. I’d like to invite you to a writing forum. I hope you enjoy the community and share some of your interesting works.
http:/ucps.proboards30.com/
2/10/2004 c5 The Unbreakable
Have I mentioned how brilliantly written this is? Keep it up, I want to see if and how they catch this maniac. The dialogue is excellent- always a good line in there.
Have I mentioned how brilliantly written this is? Keep it up, I want to see if and how they catch this maniac. The dialogue is excellent- always a good line in there.
1/25/2004 c4 The Unbreakable
Short, but sweet. My only (very small) gripe about it is that sometimes the dialogue gets too confusing without noting who says what. But who am I to give critism. Keep at it- I want to know if Vincent and Fifty Two can co-exist, and if they do, what their plan is.
Short, but sweet. My only (very small) gripe about it is that sometimes the dialogue gets too confusing without noting who says what. But who am I to give critism. Keep at it- I want to know if Vincent and Fifty Two can co-exist, and if they do, what their plan is.
1/24/2004 c3 The Unbreakable
Simply awesome and funny dialogue. I laughed literally out loud at some of the parts, but then the seriousness of the story got me reading again. Very thrilling, although I certainly wouldn't trust a man who the CIA didn't even know. You got my interest- keep going with it.
Simply awesome and funny dialogue. I laughed literally out loud at some of the parts, but then the seriousness of the story got me reading again. Very thrilling, although I certainly wouldn't trust a man who the CIA didn't even know. You got my interest- keep going with it.
1/23/2004 c1 Man of Legend
hey, thats really good, i will be waiting for the next part... if it is already out, please let me know!
hey, thats really good, i will be waiting for the next part... if it is already out, please let me know!
1/20/2004 c1 The Unbreakable
They actually made a movie called "D.O.A." from 1950 that had a cop who was poisoned and he had 24 hours to live and he had to find out who did it. Although, I do like your plot better, the way that he has to team up with his enemy. Rather brilliant. Update soon- I am VERY curious to see how this story goes.
They actually made a movie called "D.O.A." from 1950 that had a cop who was poisoned and he had 24 hours to live and he had to find out who did it. Although, I do like your plot better, the way that he has to team up with his enemy. Rather brilliant. Update soon- I am VERY curious to see how this story goes.