for What if Dragons are Real?1/23/2020 c141 Nagi
*sigh* it’s getting harder and herder to read this story.
At the beginning i loved it , it made no sense and it wasent good but it was addicting and it made me want to know what happens next, so much so that I decided to overlook the bad parts. Then it went downhill for me. The first point has to do with my own personal taste. I vehemently HATE interconnected stories with a passion. So when Kai appeared it was horrible, especially when the note at the end of the chapter basically told me that there were things about matt I wasent going to be told of unless i read “Rome”. That made me not want to read Rome even more (i was planning on reading Rome when I finished this one, now? Not anymore) But this point isnt too bad it just has to do with my personal taste.
Then Kai apeared again and i had not decided to not read Rome before then this new development would have killed all possibilities for me. The only thing i hate more than interconnected stories is forced male to female gender bending. God when i read that I actually stoped and mourned for poor kai. I actually cant look at himwith anything other than pity. Still this is also only on me and not the stories fault, it just simply overlaped with what I personally dislike in stories.
But then the sister happened, the sister was the breaking point for me. Like as i said in the beginning, i didn’t consider the story good, it was just addicting enough to made me wanna know what happens next. But when the sister appeared all desire to know the continuation disapeared. She came out of nowhen and she wasnt needed. “Oh but what about the council?” The council belongs to Kai’s story not Matt’s . If anything they should have done a revolution to it so that it would allow males and Kai wouldnt get fucked over so badly. Plus i felt that through out the story ,Matt was being build up from a wimp with a skin condition to a Noble half dragon who has self confidence. So when Ler appeared all that was thrown out the window. “Sorry Matt we dont need you anymore , youre not Folknorr heir you are not the leader we need , you are nothing so bye bye” i felt that that was what the story was saying. I felt bad for Matt they were building him up to be a leader to be proud of his lineage, to be proud of being Folknorr’s heir but it all got stripped of him and given to some random Chick who had it way better than him just because they need a female for the council that is not even of this story.
Anyway i feel that i cannot continue to read this any longer. Whe passion to know whats next has whittled , its interesting bits cannot battle again my annoyance. By the end i could bearly bear seing the Characters i liked so much being wronged in such ways.
In the end it was a nice read while it lasted, but i cant bear reading any longer.
Thanks for the story.
*sigh* it’s getting harder and herder to read this story.
At the beginning i loved it , it made no sense and it wasent good but it was addicting and it made me want to know what happens next, so much so that I decided to overlook the bad parts. Then it went downhill for me. The first point has to do with my own personal taste. I vehemently HATE interconnected stories with a passion. So when Kai appeared it was horrible, especially when the note at the end of the chapter basically told me that there were things about matt I wasent going to be told of unless i read “Rome”. That made me not want to read Rome even more (i was planning on reading Rome when I finished this one, now? Not anymore) But this point isnt too bad it just has to do with my personal taste.
Then Kai apeared again and i had not decided to not read Rome before then this new development would have killed all possibilities for me. The only thing i hate more than interconnected stories is forced male to female gender bending. God when i read that I actually stoped and mourned for poor kai. I actually cant look at himwith anything other than pity. Still this is also only on me and not the stories fault, it just simply overlaped with what I personally dislike in stories.
But then the sister happened, the sister was the breaking point for me. Like as i said in the beginning, i didn’t consider the story good, it was just addicting enough to made me wanna know what happens next. But when the sister appeared all desire to know the continuation disapeared. She came out of nowhen and she wasnt needed. “Oh but what about the council?” The council belongs to Kai’s story not Matt’s . If anything they should have done a revolution to it so that it would allow males and Kai wouldnt get fucked over so badly. Plus i felt that through out the story ,Matt was being build up from a wimp with a skin condition to a Noble half dragon who has self confidence. So when Ler appeared all that was thrown out the window. “Sorry Matt we dont need you anymore , youre not Folknorr heir you are not the leader we need , you are nothing so bye bye” i felt that that was what the story was saying. I felt bad for Matt they were building him up to be a leader to be proud of his lineage, to be proud of being Folknorr’s heir but it all got stripped of him and given to some random Chick who had it way better than him just because they need a female for the council that is not even of this story.
Anyway i feel that i cannot continue to read this any longer. Whe passion to know whats next has whittled , its interesting bits cannot battle again my annoyance. By the end i could bearly bear seing the Characters i liked so much being wronged in such ways.
In the end it was a nice read while it lasted, but i cant bear reading any longer.
Thanks for the story.
11/24/2018 c35 
22Estrellagrace
idk i was gonna finish out this story, but i just can't anymore with all the filling. This entire chapter could be summed up as:
Mark told me that I was gonna live a long time and that I practically married Connie. Whoops. Then Warren came into my room with Evee. I told him that I was half-dragon, though it took some convincing from Sam, Mandy, Connie and I.
Not trying to bash, just frustrated and think you could improve your writing style. But idk if you've changed in the past 117 chapters so who knows, maybe you've gotten better.
22Estrellagraceidk i was gonna finish out this story, but i just can't anymore with all the filling. This entire chapter could be summed up as:
Mark told me that I was gonna live a long time and that I practically married Connie. Whoops. Then Warren came into my room with Evee. I told him that I was half-dragon, though it took some convincing from Sam, Mandy, Connie and I.
Not trying to bash, just frustrated and think you could improve your writing style. But idk if you've changed in the past 117 chapters so who knows, maybe you've gotten better.
11/24/2018 c30 Estrellagrace
I like the idea of the story so far, but good lord there is so much filling in this story that I've started skipping over parts that have been repeated over... and over... and over... and over again. Like, we get it, he was adopted for votes. Yes, we know. I like the characters and all, but is it really necessary for the reader to know that kyla is only free to work on the project after 5:30 tomorrow but 6 would be better?
You're a great writer, just a lot of stuff that isn't vital to the story.
I like the idea of the story so far, but good lord there is so much filling in this story that I've started skipping over parts that have been repeated over... and over... and over... and over again. Like, we get it, he was adopted for votes. Yes, we know. I like the characters and all, but is it really necessary for the reader to know that kyla is only free to work on the project after 5:30 tomorrow but 6 would be better?
You're a great writer, just a lot of stuff that isn't vital to the story.
10/21/2018 c11 Ww
Interesting premise that got me reading and kept me here, but I'm not sure if I'd finish the rest of the story, now. The prose is a bit clunky- some of the opening paragraphs in the first formal chapter are obviously shoehorned in to describe the protagonist, for example. This chapter in particular seems to have walls of text that would have been better exposited from more subtle/smaller remarks throughout the story, too.
Interesting premise that got me reading and kept me here, but I'm not sure if I'd finish the rest of the story, now. The prose is a bit clunky- some of the opening paragraphs in the first formal chapter are obviously shoehorned in to describe the protagonist, for example. This chapter in particular seems to have walls of text that would have been better exposited from more subtle/smaller remarks throughout the story, too.
5/24/2016 c73 Reader 6583
"Yes, this kid was definitely an elf, especially with the ever present grace that seemed to exude from his very pours"
pores*
"Yes, this kid was definitely an elf, especially with the ever present grace that seemed to exude from his very pours"
pores*
5/24/2016 c71 Reader 6583
"if you are a spelling/grammar natzi"
nazi*
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"if you are a spelling/grammar natzi"
nazi*
images/thumb/7/75/Grammar_Nazi_ /600px-Grammar_Nazi_
5/24/2016 c69 Reader 6583
What's this doing here?
What's this doing here?
5/24/2016 c66 Reader 6583
If I had to complain about the emotional stuff, I think my biggest objection would be that the first few chapters of the story are more or less purely tearjerkers. Not my favorite start, but decided I'd stick with it to find out if the story would be more than just a dude crying to every other person he talks to, and I'm glad I did. (Though the emotional stuff is still 70-90% of the story so far :S, but can't drop it now that I'm almost halfway already...)
If I had to complain about the emotional stuff, I think my biggest objection would be that the first few chapters of the story are more or less purely tearjerkers. Not my favorite start, but decided I'd stick with it to find out if the story would be more than just a dude crying to every other person he talks to, and I'm glad I did. (Though the emotional stuff is still 70-90% of the story so far :S, but can't drop it now that I'm almost halfway already...)
5/24/2016 c62 Reader 6583
"any and all help in improving the quality/getting rid of some of the seemingly obvious randomness in it would be more than appreceated."
- appreciated*
"any and all help in improving the quality/getting rid of some of the seemingly obvious randomness in it would be more than appreceated."
- appreciated*
2/3/2016 c2 Black Dragon Valkyrie
Rare skin condition? Oh, I never thought of that! That would be a pretty good explaination for people who have no idea what he really is. I might actually consider that if I leave scales visible on my own half dragon character I recently created. Granted, he's technically a kid of a canon character from a popular book series and one of my OCs, but I think I can work around that. Sorry, I'm rambling! Awesome story and I'm excited to read the rest! Though if you have any advice for authors with half dragon characters, I would REALLY appreciate it! Thanks!
Rare skin condition? Oh, I never thought of that! That would be a pretty good explaination for people who have no idea what he really is. I might actually consider that if I leave scales visible on my own half dragon character I recently created. Granted, he's technically a kid of a canon character from a popular book series and one of my OCs, but I think I can work around that. Sorry, I'm rambling! Awesome story and I'm excited to read the rest! Though if you have any advice for authors with half dragon characters, I would REALLY appreciate it! Thanks!
8/12/2015 c122 Guest
Fantastic chapter, well done.
Fantastic chapter, well done.
8/10/2015 c107 Guest
Yay! I loved reading about the proposal. Very well written.
Yay! I loved reading about the proposal. Very well written.
7/31/2015 c64 1TimeyWimeyBadWolf
This version of the chapter has better detail, but the first version was more realistic.
1TimeyWimeyBadWolfThis version of the chapter has better detail, but the first version was more realistic.
7/31/2015 c60 TimeyWimeyBadWolf
Wow. That whole thing about Mandy's cousin was very well written and thought out. However, I think you could benefit from a beta reader. (I'm willing, or I'm sure you could find a better betareader than me to do it too.)
Wow. That whole thing about Mandy's cousin was very well written and thought out. However, I think you could benefit from a beta reader. (I'm willing, or I'm sure you could find a better betareader than me to do it too.)
7/30/2015 c10 TimeyWimeyBadWolf
I was dubious about this story. And then I read this chapter. Nice job.
I was dubious about this story. And then I read this chapter. Nice job.