9/11/2004 c1 4darkShadow201068
it has a good concept although it would be better if you showed a bit more of their emotions. also it couldn't hurt to describe the scenes in some more detail so the readers know exactly where the characters are and how their feeling about their situation.
it has a good concept although it would be better if you showed a bit more of their emotions. also it couldn't hurt to describe the scenes in some more detail so the readers know exactly where the characters are and how their feeling about their situation.
1/18/2004 c1 Forgotten Heart
Hey this is great material for an original story, don't doubt yourself. I think it's very creative and I wish to see what you plan on doing with it. You built a good begining for yourself that can bloom into a magnificent tale.
Hey this is great material for an original story, don't doubt yourself. I think it's very creative and I wish to see what you plan on doing with it. You built a good begining for yourself that can bloom into a magnificent tale.