for It Was Raining5/8/2005 c1 Anotherlovesickteen
aw don't leave it like that but i suppose its more realistic this way, ain't love a bitch?
aw don't leave it like that but i suppose its more realistic this way, ain't love a bitch?
8/12/2004 c1 
2Jennifer H. Westall
Hi! I stumbled on to this scene, and I definitely think you have a great ability to put a scene into words. You did a great job of creating a picture for the reader. Hope to read more!
2Jennifer H. WestallHi! I stumbled on to this scene, and I definitely think you have a great ability to put a scene into words. You did a great job of creating a picture for the reader. Hope to read more!
7/11/2004 c1 1amber n
Aw... will there be a sequel? Would you allow me to write a sequel? Wouold I have your blessing? I really should be doing my ext. 2 story for english but yeh, can't be bothered. Anyway I liked it. Cheers.
1amber nAw... will there be a sequel? Would you allow me to write a sequel? Wouold I have your blessing? I really should be doing my ext. 2 story for english but yeh, can't be bothered. Anyway I liked it. Cheers.
1/19/2004 c1 Midnightmist
I can say I can relate to this, neither say there was something in my pass that made it easier for me to feel her pain. and that's good, because my opinion won't be influenced by anything of my background.
You Could work on descriptions and widening and perfectioning your word selection, This story... This sotry is raw. there is no other word to say it, you have to cook it. But hey, sushi's raw and it's damn good. And that's how i felt.
It was raw, such raw emotion, it almost made me cry, and I DID feel related to her, and I DID feel the her tears sting in my eyes,and that is something I can't describe, because as much of a neutral reviewr I am here, I loved this. Continue this, update soon.
I can say I can relate to this, neither say there was something in my pass that made it easier for me to feel her pain. and that's good, because my opinion won't be influenced by anything of my background.
You Could work on descriptions and widening and perfectioning your word selection, This story... This sotry is raw. there is no other word to say it, you have to cook it. But hey, sushi's raw and it's damn good. And that's how i felt.
It was raw, such raw emotion, it almost made me cry, and I DID feel related to her, and I DID feel the her tears sting in my eyes,and that is something I can't describe, because as much of a neutral reviewr I am here, I loved this. Continue this, update soon.
1/19/2004 c1 heavenleigh5
Aw I can totally relate to this. What happens next?
Please have a look at my story :D
HeavenLeigh xx
Aw I can totally relate to this. What happens next?
Please have a look at my story :D
HeavenLeigh xx
1/19/2004 c1 Sugar Fairy Princess
i really liked this story. a suggestion is to work on description and the names of characters a little more but this is great! please update soon. im adding it to my favorites
i really liked this story. a suggestion is to work on description and the names of characters a little more but this is great! please update soon. im adding it to my favorites