for Eye Pools1/20/2004 c1 Heather
This poem is really good i read it a while ago too... Yea but i really like this poem
This poem is really good i read it a while ago too... Yea but i really like this poem
1/20/2004 c1 
28Rionarayne
I love this! I think this is my favorite poem that you've written. I really like the imagery; his eyes, to me, sound light blue. All of the metaphors and figures of speech that you used led me to that conclusion, so I hope I'm right! I think I can relate to you... you described all of the feelings and thoughts perfectly. Great rhythm, great inspiration. Wonderful.
Rionarayne
28RionarayneI love this! I think this is my favorite poem that you've written. I really like the imagery; his eyes, to me, sound light blue. All of the metaphors and figures of speech that you used led me to that conclusion, so I hope I'm right! I think I can relate to you... you described all of the feelings and thoughts perfectly. Great rhythm, great inspiration. Wonderful.
Rionarayne
1/20/2004 c1 lailani
this is a very interesting poem. I like it it has a very ... i can't put my finger on it but kind of like a mystery...
this is a very interesting poem. I like it it has a very ... i can't put my finger on it but kind of like a mystery...
1/20/2004 c1 Julie
Hey! that was great! wish i could write like that... _ are you ever going to start up kit and rey anytime soon?
~Julie~
Hey! that was great! wish i could write like that... _ are you ever going to start up kit and rey anytime soon?
~Julie~
1/19/2004 c1 20midnights shadow
I really liked the rhythm when I read this aloud. I particularly like "like a leaf boat down a drain..." Very descriptive.
20midnights shadowI really liked the rhythm when I read this aloud. I particularly like "like a leaf boat down a drain..." Very descriptive.
1/19/2004 c1 mrs.shigwa.cobain
eh, too lazy to log in.
Let's see, very nice! The repetition is good, it holds it all together well. Description is good (heh- leaf boats, that's awesome). I really like how you keep comparing it to water (did you do that consciously?)- first with the pools, then the ocean reference, and with a (leaf) boat, a drain, and the "i fall dripping". That is REALLy good! I like it!
Now why is it you haven't posted in forever?
eh, too lazy to log in.
Let's see, very nice! The repetition is good, it holds it all together well. Description is good (heh- leaf boats, that's awesome). I really like how you keep comparing it to water (did you do that consciously?)- first with the pools, then the ocean reference, and with a (leaf) boat, a drain, and the "i fall dripping". That is REALLy good! I like it!
Now why is it you haven't posted in forever?