for Cianan5/13/2006 c1 nomes007
Hi, Nomes here.This is a fairly useless review, but I thought I should say I like the structure in the ense of the repitition in the first line of each stanza. Not so big a fan of the inconsistent length of the end lines for each stanza (compare 'and her soul' to 'and her sudden, erratic wit') though I suspect thats just my personal taste there.Thus ends Nomes' first and terrifically useless review.
Hi, Nomes here.This is a fairly useless review, but I thought I should say I like the structure in the ense of the repitition in the first line of each stanza. Not so big a fan of the inconsistent length of the end lines for each stanza (compare 'and her soul' to 'and her sudden, erratic wit') though I suspect thats just my personal taste there.Thus ends Nomes' first and terrifically useless review.
5/10/2006 c1 
16RuathaWehrling
Hi! Just ran across this on fictionpress and, since it looked interesting, decided to read it. Let's take a look...
1.) "She hated me / with strange passion / and her music / and her soul" - It sounds really strange to me to hate someone with music. I suppose it's a poem, so you can get away with it, but it still sounds funny!
Very interesting! I like the last stanza. It leaves us with as many questions as your persona has.
Well done! -Ruatha
16RuathaWehrlingHi! Just ran across this on fictionpress and, since it looked interesting, decided to read it. Let's take a look...
1.) "She hated me / with strange passion / and her music / and her soul" - It sounds really strange to me to hate someone with music. I suppose it's a poem, so you can get away with it, but it still sounds funny!
Very interesting! I like the last stanza. It leaves us with as many questions as your persona has.
Well done! -Ruatha
5/4/2006 c1 20Pheobe Meryll
Is this the violin you were talking about? XD I would so love to play that fiddle after reading this. It would have such and interesting story to tell. You surrounded it with mystery, especially with the kind of abstract way you wrote the stanzas (she hated me/with strange passion/and her music/and her soul). loffly!
PS I hadn't read your profile when I first reviewed you...I'm so honored to have my story read by someone with a major in professional writing! thanks!
20Pheobe MeryllIs this the violin you were talking about? XD I would so love to play that fiddle after reading this. It would have such and interesting story to tell. You surrounded it with mystery, especially with the kind of abstract way you wrote the stanzas (she hated me/with strange passion/and her music/and her soul). loffly!
PS I hadn't read your profile when I first reviewed you...I'm so honored to have my story read by someone with a major in professional writing! thanks!
8/29/2004 c1 4bfmusashi
nice...you give a good description of the character within the lines of this poem. i like the formatting too, i really think it adds to the quality of the piece
4bfmusashinice...you give a good description of the character within the lines of this poem. i like the formatting too, i really think it adds to the quality of the piece
5/9/2004 c1 Earthsong12
Neat. . .but confusing. I have no idea what this is about. I’m probably just slow. I love the format though, and the language flows really nicely.
Neat. . .but confusing. I have no idea what this is about. I’m probably just slow. I love the format though, and the language flows really nicely.
3/24/2004 c1 7Relena Peace
I like that...I honsetly don't know why. But it makes me think. And I like that.
~Relena Peace
7Relena PeaceI like that...I honsetly don't know why. But it makes me think. And I like that.
~Relena Peace
1/26/2004 c1 32Morbane
She comes across as quite a fantasy heroine, eventually, which is both good and bad. I like the jump between 'she irritated me' and 'she hated me' - clever - and also clever the way you've used formatting to give the piece a very light touch. (Wish I knew how to arrange words like that with HTML).
32MorbaneShe comes across as quite a fantasy heroine, eventually, which is both good and bad. I like the jump between 'she irritated me' and 'she hated me' - clever - and also clever the way you've used formatting to give the piece a very light touch. (Wish I knew how to arrange words like that with HTML).
1/23/2004 c1 54Werecat99
I liked that a lot, escpecially after recalling the POV it's written from...
Good work.
54Werecat99I liked that a lot, escpecially after recalling the POV it's written from...
Good work.
1/22/2004 c1 Wootang
I like it! Makes me want to read more of Black Fiddle.
Side note; I'll still write those stories, but I think I'll only update them in my livejournal. *grins* Don't worry; I won't leave you in the lurch.
I like it! Makes me want to read more of Black Fiddle.
Side note; I'll still write those stories, but I think I'll only update them in my livejournal. *grins* Don't worry; I won't leave you in the lurch.