for The Girl Next Door1/31/2004 c4 
4The Great Muses
Hmm ... interesting ... it would be great if you could update soon, i really want to find out what happens next! I like
4The Great MusesHmm ... interesting ... it would be great if you could update soon, i really want to find out what happens next! I like
1/26/2004 c4 Ruairidh
I can't wait to see what happens next. This story just keeps getting better. Thanks for the reviews by the way :) and update soon!
I can't wait to see what happens next. This story just keeps getting better. Thanks for the reviews by the way :) and update soon!
1/25/2004 c2 1Lauren K
There's no real emotion in this story. Maybe there's a good chance for plot development, but...you need to do more than just plain narrate. You need to do what the character was thinking. Incorporate details-they are extremely important. Also, work on developing all of your characters a little more.
~Kiara
1Lauren KThere's no real emotion in this story. Maybe there's a good chance for plot development, but...you need to do more than just plain narrate. You need to do what the character was thinking. Incorporate details-they are extremely important. Also, work on developing all of your characters a little more.
~Kiara
1/25/2004 c3 13Lil Lalita
Very original and creative. I like it! It had an intersting, grabbing introduction and from there... wow. I liked the tone most of all. The only suggestion I can make, for chapter two, was less dialogue. Other than that, awesome! I can't wait to see what happens next.
~Lil Lalita
13Lil LalitaVery original and creative. I like it! It had an intersting, grabbing introduction and from there... wow. I liked the tone most of all. The only suggestion I can make, for chapter two, was less dialogue. Other than that, awesome! I can't wait to see what happens next.
~Lil Lalita
1/23/2004 c3 4The Great Muses
That's a really good piece of writing! I like it ... and the dream is unusual, like a dream should be. Great!
4The Great MusesThat's a really good piece of writing! I like it ... and the dream is unusual, like a dream should be. Great!
1/23/2004 c3 Ruairidh
Hey, this is really good. :) I love it so far. It's definetly original-unlike anything i've read before. And it's very well-written and descriptive. keep up the good work!
Hey, this is really good. :) I love it so far. It's definetly original-unlike anything i've read before. And it's very well-written and descriptive. keep up the good work!
1/23/2004 c3 90The Zaniak
This is brilliant...although extremely odd. Like all your writing, I can't wait to see what happens next.
90The ZaniakThis is brilliant...although extremely odd. Like all your writing, I can't wait to see what happens next.