for Three Houses1/25/2004 c1 
85Angel Snowson
Yep, still like this as much as I did the first time. Keep up the good work hon'.
85Angel SnowsonYep, still like this as much as I did the first time. Keep up the good work hon'.
1/24/2004 c1 61jigsaw
Woah . . I really like this! I love the rhyme the rhythm, for the msot part, is perfect, and it's wonderfully origional! I also like the allusion to Romeo and Juliet, all in all, a great poem!
61jigsawWoah . . I really like this! I love the rhyme the rhythm, for the msot part, is perfect, and it's wonderfully origional! I also like the allusion to Romeo and Juliet, all in all, a great poem!
1/23/2004 c1 15poetry-daemon
Very good. Your rhyme and meter do you credit, especially since it does not become ridiculous. You get a good narrative and point across-in short, a well crafted piece.
My one piece of constructive criticism would be to try some free verse. Usually, when one has such control over meter as you exhibit here, their free verse can be ver intriguing. I will most definately read more of your work.
15poetry-daemonVery good. Your rhyme and meter do you credit, especially since it does not become ridiculous. You get a good narrative and point across-in short, a well crafted piece.
My one piece of constructive criticism would be to try some free verse. Usually, when one has such control over meter as you exhibit here, their free verse can be ver intriguing. I will most definately read more of your work.