for These Tears Just Quit Rolling6/23/2004 c1 
2spokey
Whoa. That poem was awesome. You described that feeling REALLY well, I hope you never felt like that though. You have an awesome way with words, and making poems flow and not just depend on the rhyming scheme, although you pull that off masterfully as well. =o)
Thanks for the review on my poem.. You were my first one! And, I agree with you about the last two lines, I never noticed how much they didn't fit before, but now I'm considering making a revised one and ending it differently.
Keep up the great writing!
2spokeyWhoa. That poem was awesome. You described that feeling REALLY well, I hope you never felt like that though. You have an awesome way with words, and making poems flow and not just depend on the rhyming scheme, although you pull that off masterfully as well. =o)
Thanks for the review on my poem.. You were my first one! And, I agree with you about the last two lines, I never noticed how much they didn't fit before, but now I'm considering making a revised one and ending it differently.
Keep up the great writing!
4/6/2004 c1 118origamikitty
The meaning of twined is supposed to be along the lines of "You say we were never bound" ya know? maybe? And I was saying the fact that I had to sacrifice was sick.
118origamikittyThe meaning of twined is supposed to be along the lines of "You say we were never bound" ya know? maybe? And I was saying the fact that I had to sacrifice was sick.
4/6/2004 c1 rachel
hey mare...just a ? as your editor and chief...what do ya mean by "twined" in this sentence-"You say we were never twined." also..."i was forced to sacrifice..it's so sick i wish to choke.."
it's sick...your sick? i dunno rythym wise..i'm a stickler for rythym but you know that...feel free to ignore me...but i just thought i'd write it instead of iming you...talk to me later
hey mare...just a ? as your editor and chief...what do ya mean by "twined" in this sentence-"You say we were never twined." also..."i was forced to sacrifice..it's so sick i wish to choke.."
it's sick...your sick? i dunno rythym wise..i'm a stickler for rythym but you know that...feel free to ignore me...but i just thought i'd write it instead of iming you...talk to me later
1/30/2004 c1 3Taka ichijouji
This poem is very sad but very powerful. It speaks loudly and it's very articulate. Good job.
3Taka ichijoujiThis poem is very sad but very powerful. It speaks loudly and it's very articulate. Good job.