for Corprate Punx1/31/2004 c1 
40Funsmoke
Very interesting. Very. It's got good metre, but it can't really decide whether it's verse-libre or not. Great idea, though.
40FunsmokeVery interesting. Very. It's got good metre, but it can't really decide whether it's verse-libre or not. Great idea, though.
1/31/2004 c1 4The Great Muses
Nice! I really think that this poem might work even better if it rhymed the whole way through - just a suggestion.
Other than that, you SHOULD be proud! (ALthough, i must admit, i'm slightly, ok, biased, towards poems that rhyme. Morally, i'm against poems that don't rhyme, but as far as non rhyming poems go, this one's pretty good!)
4The Great MusesNice! I really think that this poem might work even better if it rhymed the whole way through - just a suggestion.
Other than that, you SHOULD be proud! (ALthough, i must admit, i'm slightly, ok, biased, towards poems that rhyme. Morally, i'm against poems that don't rhyme, but as far as non rhyming poems go, this one's pretty good!)
1/30/2004 c1 5Accalia Auria
Wow. So good. So true. ::shakes head:: It's a sad state today's punk scene is in, my friend.
5Accalia AuriaWow. So good. So true. ::shakes head:: It's a sad state today's punk scene is in, my friend.
1/28/2004 c1 14tresparadisE
hm... i like it, but maybe you mean 'underhanded' instead of second hand? or i missed something? im not sure quite how punks or punx fit into it but in the general, i like it.
cheers
-tresparadise
14tresparadisEhm... i like it, but maybe you mean 'underhanded' instead of second hand? or i missed something? im not sure quite how punks or punx fit into it but in the general, i like it.
cheers
-tresparadise