
1/31/2004 c1
40Funsmoke
Very interesting. Very. It's got good metre, but it can't really decide whether it's verse-libre or not. Great idea, though.

Very interesting. Very. It's got good metre, but it can't really decide whether it's verse-libre or not. Great idea, though.
1/31/2004 c1
4The Great Muses
Nice! I really think that this poem might work even better if it rhymed the whole way through - just a suggestion.
Other than that, you SHOULD be proud! (ALthough, i must admit, i'm slightly, ok, biased, towards poems that rhyme. Morally, i'm against poems that don't rhyme, but as far as non rhyming poems go, this one's pretty good!)

Nice! I really think that this poem might work even better if it rhymed the whole way through - just a suggestion.
Other than that, you SHOULD be proud! (ALthough, i must admit, i'm slightly, ok, biased, towards poems that rhyme. Morally, i'm against poems that don't rhyme, but as far as non rhyming poems go, this one's pretty good!)
1/30/2004 c1
5Accalia Auria
Wow. So good. So true. ::shakes head:: It's a sad state today's punk scene is in, my friend.

Wow. So good. So true. ::shakes head:: It's a sad state today's punk scene is in, my friend.
1/28/2004 c1
14tresparadisE
hm... i like it, but maybe you mean 'underhanded' instead of second hand? or i missed something? im not sure quite how punks or punx fit into it but in the general, i like it.
cheers
-tresparadise

hm... i like it, but maybe you mean 'underhanded' instead of second hand? or i missed something? im not sure quite how punks or punx fit into it but in the general, i like it.
cheers
-tresparadise