for Emotion6/17/2009 c2 
4HighOnBrokenWings
I really like what the will said to his son and daughter. And what he left for beth, and said to her, well, it was so sad! Great work. Keep it up :D
4HighOnBrokenWingsI really like what the will said to his son and daughter. And what he left for beth, and said to her, well, it was so sad! Great work. Keep it up :D
6/17/2009 c1 HighOnBrokenWings
Really cool. Maybe use a new line for each time the speaker changes, but other than that, it was really good. So sad.
Really cool. Maybe use a new line for each time the speaker changes, but other than that, it was really good. So sad.
7/3/2005 c2 14Cheyenne Kai
"I'm very sorry to all of you for your lose" 'lose' - 'loss'"I also leave you the full length mirror in the master bedroom. Because you're vain" - I thought this was funny.
aww, it's so sad.
14Cheyenne Kai"I'm very sorry to all of you for your lose" 'lose' - 'loss'"I also leave you the full length mirror in the master bedroom. Because you're vain" - I thought this was funny.
aww, it's so sad.
7/3/2005 c1 Cheyenne Kai
I thought this was a good introduction into the character's lives.
"I had to many issues" 'to' - 'too'
I thought this was a good introduction into the character's lives.
"I had to many issues" 'to' - 'too'
11/16/2004 c2 16kaika switched
Whoa...some will. I bet the rest of the family's pretty pissed, 'cept for Bethy, of course. Hah. I wonder what they'll do, and what she'll do. Keep writing!
16kaika switchedWhoa...some will. I bet the rest of the family's pretty pissed, 'cept for Bethy, of course. Hah. I wonder what they'll do, and what she'll do. Keep writing!
6/13/2004 c2 8Spooky152
Well...I wonder what's going to happen next. I bet the rest of her relatives are pretty pissed; will they try to retaliate? Until you post again
Katie
8Spooky152Well...I wonder what's going to happen next. I bet the rest of her relatives are pretty pissed; will they try to retaliate? Until you post again
Katie
3/24/2004 c2 Oiseau Rouge
I really like this story. Update soon, i cant wait to read more.
~BleedingOnyx
I really like this story. Update soon, i cant wait to read more.
~BleedingOnyx
3/24/2004 c1 1BlueBeauty
It was pretty good, if i were you i would give a little more background before launching into the main piece. Or maybe you could let the character have flashbacks to what happen before her grandfather died
1BlueBeautyIt was pretty good, if i were you i would give a little more background before launching into the main piece. Or maybe you could let the character have flashbacks to what happen before her grandfather died
3/24/2004 c2 anonymous
great story. it could use a little work as far as smoother phrasing, but that's true of almost any story. keep writing
great story. it could use a little work as far as smoother phrasing, but that's true of almost any story. keep writing
3/24/2004 c2 8Adema22Angel
That's so sad. I can see why she would hold back her emotions though. Can't wait until you update this.
8Adema22AngelThat's so sad. I can see why she would hold back her emotions though. Can't wait until you update this.
1/29/2004 c1 Melancholy Butterfly
This is quite a melancholic piece of writing and I already have great sympathy for the protagonist Beth. Is there going to be more?
P.S Thanks for the review! :)
This is quite a melancholic piece of writing and I already have great sympathy for the protagonist Beth. Is there going to be more?
P.S Thanks for the review! :)