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10/20/2005 c1 21CaramelCream
short and sweet (though not a sweet message). I love how you get to the point without having to spell it out to the reader.
5/2/2004 c1 168SeaVoi
Wow, who made you angry, this is a very good haiku, i like it! :)
4/26/2004 c1 29Shades of Ink
You have a great way of harnessing pain in three lines.
It almost makes me pity the poem itself. It so small... but with such huge meaning. Great job.
3/25/2004 c1 26Endless Nightmares
Hello-
Wonderful haiku. Nice use of your 5-7-5. Great job. This either could be really sad, or really disturbing. But a very good haiku.
3/13/2004 c1 105Chaloux
I like the three/ four liners. They help you focus on the point. Going to read some more!
2/20/2004 c1 144Infinite Smiles
I'm not a big fan of haikus, but this one is rather beautiful.
2/9/2004 c1 16Morde Tempest
Haiku is one of my favorite forms. Keep it up!
2/9/2004 c1 12tangible mandible
I've never been able to write haiku, so I think its cool when I find a good one. You've done a good job creating the emotion here. Anyways, good job, and thanks for the review!
2/3/2004 c1 194Aslan Israel
Short, but flows nicely.
1/30/2004 c1 WhiteRequiem
Very well written. The way that each line flows smoothly into the other intensifies the power of this haiku.
"Drowing in your bitter words" is a very impacting line...
-Grant19-
1/29/2004 c1 Uranian
This is the definition of 'short but sweet'. Seeing it so short when I first saw it was kind of surprising, but the words...and the lines tied in so well. Great job!
1/29/2004 c1 3Chaosrayne
Hey, Lsay.
Nice haiku. Nice. It's a haiku that conveys a depth of emotion beyond simple words... it's very deep and intriguing. I like it. Dark and lonely.
...why am I talking like my english teacher? Oh well.
Oh, and thanks for reviewing my 'last words' fic. In case you didn't know, there are two more chapters of that thing. It's up already.
1/29/2004 c1 17Wingless Fairy
Very good. Usually haiku seems incomplete and too short, but this was perfect. Keep writng! Thanks for reviewing my poem
1/29/2004 c1 17CrimsonSoulTears
Wow. A haiku I enjoyed. Never read one of those before.
(success on your part I feel).
As it is a miracle it is added tot he favourites.

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