for Horatio's Letter4/2/2006 c1 
32pointythings
I love the concept, but I think you're getting too technical. The only place I see Horatio's feelings are at the beginning and the end. Everything else has less emotion than a blurb on the back of a novel; it's just kind of a summary. I think you could work with this more; it's a good concept, and you're writing style is decent, but I'm just not getting anything out of it.
32pointythingsI love the concept, but I think you're getting too technical. The only place I see Horatio's feelings are at the beginning and the end. Everything else has less emotion than a blurb on the back of a novel; it's just kind of a summary. I think you could work with this more; it's a good concept, and you're writing style is decent, but I'm just not getting anything out of it.
11/25/2004 c1 babyboi
You know. When I had to read Hamlet for English. I hated it! But I like this. And that's really saying something.
You know. When I had to read Hamlet for English. I hated it! But I like this. And that's really saying something.
7/15/2004 c1 Menolly
That's a better summary of Hamlet than I managed for school.
That's a better summary of Hamlet than I managed for school.
5/14/2004 c1 64chicanerysmile
Okay, I don't understand this as I have never ever read Hamlet, but [email protected] sure it's good anyway.
64chicanerysmileOkay, I don't understand this as I have never ever read Hamlet, but [email protected] sure it's good anyway.
2/7/2004 c1 fuzzy logic
You have a good communication of emotion both in the beginning and end of Horatio's letter. The center part sounds too much like a summery. Try adding in Horatio's emotions on the events, rather than just stating the facts.
You have a good communication of emotion both in the beginning and end of Horatio's letter. The center part sounds too much like a summery. Try adding in Horatio's emotions on the events, rather than just stating the facts.