Just In
for June Thirteen

1/31/2004 c1 10Crelian2202
They Realised this was there last ever night. That makes little sense the line should read last night ever or just last night (second if you want to keep the rhyme). Also the 'but' starting the line in the same stanza should be removed, it is a weak starter and the line sounds better without it. Other than those two things very nicely done.

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