for My Works5/23/2004 c3 vanburen
I understand the waves, but I don't know what to make of the "salty spray". Tears? Hmm...I must think about this one.
please please post "heart" it sounds good!
I understand the waves, but I don't know what to make of the "salty spray". Tears? Hmm...I must think about this one.
please please post "heart" it sounds good!
5/2/2004 c4 vanburen
I really liked poems 3$4, because it seemed they were more developed in regards to your ability to describe how you feel. I have mixed feelings about "Missing You". It wasn't bad, I just feel that you could have taken it a step further. Why do you miss all those things about those person? Exactly how does it make you feel inside? Then, think about how you can metaphorize or otherwise emphasize those feelings to make them stand out and really hit them in the gut.
Peace,
bluefaerie33
I really liked poems 3$4, because it seemed they were more developed in regards to your ability to describe how you feel. I have mixed feelings about "Missing You". It wasn't bad, I just feel that you could have taken it a step further. Why do you miss all those things about those person? Exactly how does it make you feel inside? Then, think about how you can metaphorize or otherwise emphasize those feelings to make them stand out and really hit them in the gut.
Peace,
bluefaerie33