for The Ninth Son3/6/2004 c1 
21ever.dream.of.me.please
*claps*
Well done! I like it! I'm looking forward to more soon.
21ever.dream.of.me.please*claps*
Well done! I like it! I'm looking forward to more soon.
2/11/2004 c1 12tangible mandible
Your formatting made this a little confusing, but the story line was great. You've got good descriptions, but if I were you I'd get into Arlice's head a little more. What was he thinking as all this happened? Otherwise, good job. Write more soon!
12tangible mandibleYour formatting made this a little confusing, but the story line was great. You've got good descriptions, but if I were you I'd get into Arlice's head a little more. What was he thinking as all this happened? Otherwise, good job. Write more soon!
2/11/2004 c1 2midnightdreamsforever
Um... its a good story, but without the paragraphing it kinda lost me towards the end. Could you please sort out the last paragraph because its huge, and make reading difficult...
2midnightdreamsforeverUm... its a good story, but without the paragraphing it kinda lost me towards the end. Could you please sort out the last paragraph because its huge, and make reading difficult...