for A Little Song8/11/2006 c1 
9Michael Gerard
Hey, this is good! Rather creepy! A tad clichéd, mind, but who am I to say that? lol
(Oh and on that note I'll be updating my stories very very soon!)
You wanted suggestions for a better title. How about, "All Alone"? Or even, "Pretty Girl in a Big Old Mansion". Nah, I'm joking about the latter.
Anyways, I enjoyed reading this. Well done.
9Michael GerardHey, this is good! Rather creepy! A tad clichéd, mind, but who am I to say that? lol
(Oh and on that note I'll be updating my stories very very soon!)
You wanted suggestions for a better title. How about, "All Alone"? Or even, "Pretty Girl in a Big Old Mansion". Nah, I'm joking about the latter.
Anyways, I enjoyed reading this. Well done.
5/19/2006 c1 2writergurlLW
This was great! The ending was the best part i have to say. It's an ironic ending that makes you laugh "HA HA"
2writergurlLWThis was great! The ending was the best part i have to say. It's an ironic ending that makes you laugh "HA HA"
12/10/2005 c1 20Pheobe Meryll
Got quite creepy towards the middle there. dreams are so wierd, aren't they? I did enjoy it, though I think you rushed the beginning just a little. you had so much deatil i the middle it seemed lopsided wihtout more at the beginning.
the 'she' should not be capitolized. Your grammar was pretty good beside this, but you need to watch out when it comes to quotations.
"considering she was a model and never really did run"...actually, how do models get to be that skinny if not through exercise...which requires running right? ;)
keep writing!
20Pheobe MeryllGot quite creepy towards the middle there. dreams are so wierd, aren't they? I did enjoy it, though I think you rushed the beginning just a little. you had so much deatil i the middle it seemed lopsided wihtout more at the beginning.
the 'she' should not be capitolized. Your grammar was pretty good beside this, but you need to watch out when it comes to quotations.
"considering she was a model and never really did run"...actually, how do models get to be that skinny if not through exercise...which requires running right? ;)
keep writing!
6/9/2005 c1 9Jocelyne
Okay... so I think I'm going to have nightmares. Good grief this is creepy.
And I'm all alone.
Ah!
Reminds me of The Ring/Gollum all in one.
9JocelyneOkay... so I think I'm going to have nightmares. Good grief this is creepy.
And I'm all alone.
Ah!
Reminds me of The Ring/Gollum all in one.
11/25/2004 c1 6Black and Silver Dreamer
Creepy story, I like it alot. hm...a title? Well, I think the one you have right now works, not every horror story has to have a 'creepy' title, let there be some oxymorons and stuff, a horror story with a happy title, what fun!
6Black and Silver DreamerCreepy story, I like it alot. hm...a title? Well, I think the one you have right now works, not every horror story has to have a 'creepy' title, let there be some oxymorons and stuff, a horror story with a happy title, what fun!
7/8/2004 c1 SeventhBell Astarael
i'll try to think of a title for ya im not a very good title person
i love this story its a horror one and i like those im adding you to my favorites list update soon! :)
i'll try to think of a title for ya im not a very good title person
i love this story its a horror one and i like those im adding you to my favorites list update soon! :)
6/10/2004 c1 phinney
crepy! but it's a good story, galeng mo pala mag sulat ah! um... is bloodchild89 nikki wong? same style magwrite eh, haha, just wondering, ok, ciao. i guess di toh review, just a comment or somethng, watever.Ü
crepy! but it's a good story, galeng mo pala mag sulat ah! um... is bloodchild89 nikki wong? same style magwrite eh, haha, just wondering, ok, ciao. i guess di toh review, just a comment or somethng, watever.Ü
5/5/2004 c1 aisjaojfiuaefhodh
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA. omg the end made me laugh like i haven't in a while. i duno if it was supposed to be funny, but it was. i really really really liked it. very nice. by the way, thanks for reviewing one of my poems!
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA. omg the end made me laugh like i haven't in a while. i duno if it was supposed to be funny, but it was. i really really really liked it. very nice. by the way, thanks for reviewing one of my poems!
3/21/2004 c1 1Safety Canary
DAG! You've stopped coming to Fiction Press? That sucks... Anyway, this was a very creepy story, and I like it because my sister's name is Tara. Heh. I'm glad Mincy's not really dead (yet) because I'm a cat fan. I have eight of them (but it wasn't my decision, so...). Good job, amethyst! Looking forward to more Frozen Heart, if you ever get out of writer's block for that story.
'Slayer
1Safety CanaryDAG! You've stopped coming to Fiction Press? That sucks... Anyway, this was a very creepy story, and I like it because my sister's name is Tara. Heh. I'm glad Mincy's not really dead (yet) because I'm a cat fan. I have eight of them (but it wasn't my decision, so...). Good job, amethyst! Looking forward to more Frozen Heart, if you ever get out of writer's block for that story.
'Slayer
3/7/2004 c1 8rufflesia
Maica-fufflesia are now one but anyway, I've been having more dreams than the usual ones and I'm now intrepeting them. It ttok me weks to complete the other one. Anyway, it's good!
8rufflesiaMaica-fufflesia are now one but anyway, I've been having more dreams than the usual ones and I'm now intrepeting them. It ttok me weks to complete the other one. Anyway, it's good!
2/18/2004 c1 37Fantwriter
Um about the title, yea you should change it, tho i don't know to what xD It sounds more cheerful than scary.
By the way...that story was creepy I hope i don't think about it at night...dun dun dun...too bad i had to read it at 9:20 *looks around*
37FantwriterUm about the title, yea you should change it, tho i don't know to what xD It sounds more cheerful than scary.
By the way...that story was creepy I hope i don't think about it at night...dun dun dun...too bad i had to read it at 9:20 *looks around*
2/16/2004 c1 21Shade2
Hee hee hee! That was hilarious! *collapses* The thought of a little kid walking around singing that is just funny to me. This was pretty good.
21Shade2Hee hee hee! That was hilarious! *collapses* The thought of a little kid walking around singing that is just funny to me. This was pretty good.
2/13/2004 c1 60QueenRemge13
Whoa, that was, well that was freaky. I am really happy that my dreams don't come true or . . . well I'd be a REALLY dead girl. Great job, keep writing!
QR
P.S.
'Little dead girl' maybe?
60QueenRemge13Whoa, that was, well that was freaky. I am really happy that my dreams don't come true or . . . well I'd be a REALLY dead girl. Great job, keep writing!
QR
P.S.
'Little dead girl' maybe?