for Journies of Sarcasm5/3/2004 c7 
7AethraZip
Her daddy? Whoosh! Small world.
If she hates elves so much, why's she trying to free them? And from whom, exactly? I understand the orc thing, but why are all the elves in camps? Argh! You must update so that the murkiness becomes clear! Otherwise I shall tear out my hair and weep!
*adds to favorites*
~Zip
7AethraZipHer daddy? Whoosh! Small world.
If she hates elves so much, why's she trying to free them? And from whom, exactly? I understand the orc thing, but why are all the elves in camps? Argh! You must update so that the murkiness becomes clear! Otherwise I shall tear out my hair and weep!
*adds to favorites*
~Zip
5/3/2004 c6 AethraZip
I'd like to read 'The Legend of the Headless Chicken and the Twig'. Just the title tickles my spleen.
Er, funny bone.
I know I've been rather critical about this story, but the truth is, the more critical I am, the more I like it. If I like something, I look for flaws.. dunno why, it's a weird trait of mine.
I'm curious as to Elia/Rukie's past, and I'm going to read until I learn the truth, dammit! *reads on*
~Zip
I'd like to read 'The Legend of the Headless Chicken and the Twig'. Just the title tickles my spleen.
Er, funny bone.
I know I've been rather critical about this story, but the truth is, the more critical I am, the more I like it. If I like something, I look for flaws.. dunno why, it's a weird trait of mine.
I'm curious as to Elia/Rukie's past, and I'm going to read until I learn the truth, dammit! *reads on*
~Zip
5/3/2004 c5 AethraZip
Heh, rope is murder on your teeth. How I know that I shall not say.
A suggestion: don't use 'lil' in stories. 'Little' takes more effort to type, but reads better, especially in prose.
With the whole rope-chewing thing, if she waited until the smoke had billowed up, wouldn't the fire have started to burn her? She would at least notice the heat. If there's a fire burning at your feet, it's not easy to ignore it and concentrate on escaping.
Talli and Brynn to the rescue! Rukie's life just gets better and better, doesn't it?
~Zip
Heh, rope is murder on your teeth. How I know that I shall not say.
A suggestion: don't use 'lil' in stories. 'Little' takes more effort to type, but reads better, especially in prose.
With the whole rope-chewing thing, if she waited until the smoke had billowed up, wouldn't the fire have started to burn her? She would at least notice the heat. If there's a fire burning at your feet, it's not easy to ignore it and concentrate on escaping.
Talli and Brynn to the rescue! Rukie's life just gets better and better, doesn't it?
~Zip
5/3/2004 c4 AethraZip
Those damn pink unicorns..
This was a pretty funny chapter, actually. I love the sardonic commentary going on in Rukie's head, and I like how she thinks only for herself. A nice change from most fantasy heroines, who think only of everyone else.
The orcs (and Brynn, for that matter) appeared rather out of nowhere. I was also surprised when neither Rukie nor Talli put up a fight. Brynn is excused because he just escaped, though he didn't do it very well. Out of the frying pan, into the fire.
I shall read on!
~Zip
Those damn pink unicorns..
This was a pretty funny chapter, actually. I love the sardonic commentary going on in Rukie's head, and I like how she thinks only for herself. A nice change from most fantasy heroines, who think only of everyone else.
The orcs (and Brynn, for that matter) appeared rather out of nowhere. I was also surprised when neither Rukie nor Talli put up a fight. Brynn is excused because he just escaped, though he didn't do it very well. Out of the frying pan, into the fire.
I shall read on!
~Zip
5/3/2004 c3 AethraZip
Poor Rukie. Sounds like we have something in common: enjoying torturing characters (if you've read any of my story 'Under Meteors', you'll see how much I hurt Ryst. And Mercury, for that matter.). Albino dark elves is something I never thought of. Interesting, yes, precious..
*clicks arrow to next chapter*
~Zip
Poor Rukie. Sounds like we have something in common: enjoying torturing characters (if you've read any of my story 'Under Meteors', you'll see how much I hurt Ryst. And Mercury, for that matter.). Albino dark elves is something I never thought of. Interesting, yes, precious..
*clicks arrow to next chapter*
~Zip
5/3/2004 c2 AethraZip
Pink unicorns make good scapegoats, don't they? I'll have to remember that..
The whole thing with Talli was a little abrupt. If Rukie was indeed trying to leave, and with one of their horses, he probably wouldn't have bothered with the "come back or I go with you". Anyone with sense would just tackle her out of the saddle, or something. Even though Talli seems good-hearted and.. nice, in a slightly dimwitted way, I don't think his philanthropy would extend to letting Rukie take one of his horses, even if he went with her.
And wouldn't his family be upset? Both of them disappearing without a trace? Rumors would fly.
*guns down rumor* Rawr.
But you know your characters better than I do, which goes without saying, so I'll just shut up now. This is an obscenely long review already.
~Zip
Pink unicorns make good scapegoats, don't they? I'll have to remember that..
The whole thing with Talli was a little abrupt. If Rukie was indeed trying to leave, and with one of their horses, he probably wouldn't have bothered with the "come back or I go with you". Anyone with sense would just tackle her out of the saddle, or something. Even though Talli seems good-hearted and.. nice, in a slightly dimwitted way, I don't think his philanthropy would extend to letting Rukie take one of his horses, even if he went with her.
And wouldn't his family be upset? Both of them disappearing without a trace? Rumors would fly.
*guns down rumor* Rawr.
But you know your characters better than I do, which goes without saying, so I'll just shut up now. This is an obscenely long review already.
~Zip
5/3/2004 c1 AethraZip
Ogre butt hair rope! Heh, that's a new one ^^
I read your 'Advice on Making Characters' and decided to check out Rukie. I like her already. The plot isn't clear yet, but it's only chapter one, so no worries.
One thing I noticed was that you tended to use run-on sentences. Commas don't allow you to continue a sentence indefinitely; semicolons do. Like that one. Just to letcha know.
Otherwise, lookin' good, and I'm moving on to chapter 2.
~Zip
Ogre butt hair rope! Heh, that's a new one ^^
I read your 'Advice on Making Characters' and decided to check out Rukie. I like her already. The plot isn't clear yet, but it's only chapter one, so no worries.
One thing I noticed was that you tended to use run-on sentences. Commas don't allow you to continue a sentence indefinitely; semicolons do. Like that one. Just to letcha know.
Otherwise, lookin' good, and I'm moving on to chapter 2.
~Zip
5/3/2004 c1 4RurouniMarion
BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! OMG, THIS STORY IS SO FUNNY! i'm reading more of it, and i'm going to review every chappy. tehehehe, i'm gonna bug the heck outta ya!
4RurouniMarionBWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! OMG, THIS STORY IS SO FUNNY! i'm reading more of it, and i'm going to review every chappy. tehehehe, i'm gonna bug the heck outta ya!
4/24/2004 c7 3InuyashaLuver99
Boy you know how to write a story! Keep updating and don't forget to R&R my stories too
3InuyashaLuver99Boy you know how to write a story! Keep updating and don't forget to R&R my stories too
4/21/2004 c1 Neo Triono
I happen to know, personally, that ogre-butt-rope isn't as bad as it sounds...Anyways, this is a very imaginative story that I absoloutly adore. May I suggest, however, be a little more careful with punctuation
I happen to know, personally, that ogre-butt-rope isn't as bad as it sounds...Anyways, this is a very imaginative story that I absoloutly adore. May I suggest, however, be a little more careful with punctuation
4/13/2004 c7 Persn A
Eep! I would not like to be on the recieving end of Rukie's hatred. I think that you should have her do something to make "Chicken", "Twig", and "monster" fear her. Killing something for example! ...well, Rukie DID say blood was a pretty color...
Eep! I would not like to be on the recieving end of Rukie's hatred. I think that you should have her do something to make "Chicken", "Twig", and "monster" fear her. Killing something for example! ...well, Rukie DID say blood was a pretty color...
4/13/2004 c6 Persn A
^_^ Tee Hee *laughs* Why ARE Brynn and Talli stalking Rukie?
^_^ Tee Hee *laughs* Why ARE Brynn and Talli stalking Rukie?
4/12/2004 c7 Mychael Lynne
well there was an unexpected twist. r u gonna include the Legen of the Headless Chicken and the Twig? I'd like to read that sometime... ^_^
mUnKbUd
well there was an unexpected twist. r u gonna include the Legen of the Headless Chicken and the Twig? I'd like to read that sometime... ^_^
mUnKbUd
4/12/2004 c7 37Lilyoftheflames
Always a pleasure to read a nice sarcastic story...I LOVE SARCASTIC PPL! kk well, I'll be waiting for the next chapter to come out *though I'm sure I've already read it* but hey whats one more time gonna do? heh I'll be waiting! -ko
37LilyoftheflamesAlways a pleasure to read a nice sarcastic story...I LOVE SARCASTIC PPL! kk well, I'll be waiting for the next chapter to come out *though I'm sure I've already read it* but hey whats one more time gonna do? heh I'll be waiting! -ko
3/22/2004 c5 10mute-demon81
JA JA JA JA JA! oh, ermle, ah, anyways, I wonder why no one comments O_O, its such a good story! COMMENT PEOPLE THEN MAYBE SHE'D UPDATE! RAWR! ._. you people are just blah...*wants to read muh more of the Rukie story*
10mute-demon81JA JA JA JA JA! oh, ermle, ah, anyways, I wonder why no one comments O_O, its such a good story! COMMENT PEOPLE THEN MAYBE SHE'D UPDATE! RAWR! ._. you people are just blah...*wants to read muh more of the Rukie story*