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for Forgotten By Your Smile

5/15/2004 c1 27Kutsu
Aw, this so nice, and sad. I feel like crying. I like the terms you use to express yourself. Everything fits the way it should (well thats sort of ironic but oh well) I really like your poetry keep writing.
2/20/2004 c1 144Infinite Smiles
I love this stanza...
Sweeping up shards of the shattered memories
Trying to find something left in it,
You want to put it back together
But the pieces just won't fit.
Well done.
2/13/2004 c1 12kalariah
The title is very descriptive.. I think it matches your poem very well. Your metaphors are excellent, and I really like the emotion portrayed. Your last two lines are heartbreakingly eloquent - "Please don't do to her/What you did to me." Great job!
2/13/2004 c1 6Naquam
Wow, that's really good. I like the last stanza best. The rhythem sometimes is hard to feel, but very nicely done.
Naquam

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