for Delirium in C minor1/20/2006 c1 katt's got your tongue
loved the first stanza. i liked alot of the lines in this poem. wow. awesome. the title was attention-drawing. how do you think of this?
loved the first stanza. i liked alot of the lines in this poem. wow. awesome. the title was attention-drawing. how do you think of this?
10/4/2005 c1 
39Moppish
Hah, wow, loved this so much. This is some of the most creative imagery I've ever seen. Love it love it love it. So many disgusting and strange images it's almost funny! And I can really see how the last two lines completely sum up the rest of the poem. This is really great. It's going on my favorite's list.
39MoppishHah, wow, loved this so much. This is some of the most creative imagery I've ever seen. Love it love it love it. So many disgusting and strange images it's almost funny! And I can really see how the last two lines completely sum up the rest of the poem. This is really great. It's going on my favorite's list.
6/24/2005 c1 5Senkai Ninja
Wow, all I can say is "wow"! This is a WONDERFUL poem and yes, I am kind of gaping at it now...thankee for your review of my works!
5Senkai NinjaWow, all I can say is "wow"! This is a WONDERFUL poem and yes, I am kind of gaping at it now...thankee for your review of my works!
6/5/2005 c1 1English Snow Rose
This has to be one of the most beautiful pieces that I have ever read.It is so beautifully haunting and dark, and lord knows I love the 'dark side.' When I read this I could imagine my fiance and me in a dark, rotting castle, waltzing in a ballroom filled with spiderwebs and black dripping candles...This truly is beautiful.
1English Snow RoseThis has to be one of the most beautiful pieces that I have ever read.It is so beautifully haunting and dark, and lord knows I love the 'dark side.' When I read this I could imagine my fiance and me in a dark, rotting castle, waltzing in a ballroom filled with spiderwebs and black dripping candles...This truly is beautiful.
8/28/2004 c1 soulfulactress
i love it so much i don't even know how to describe what i liked. ah ur so good its annoying me! to each his own, though, i don't write poetry, but i get an idea for a new fic like every day.
i love it so much i don't even know how to describe what i liked. ah ur so good its annoying me! to each his own, though, i don't write poetry, but i get an idea for a new fic like every day.
5/7/2004 c1 Lailassi
Wow.
You write very interesting stuff. Your rythm isn't really well established, so it gave the poem a sort of choppy feel. That went pretty well wth the subject matter, but it's something to work on if you want to develop a more fluid pattern to some of your writing. It almost seemed as if you wanted to develop a rhyme scheme but didn't figure out the right words and speech patterns to make the rhyming work. Once again, this worked well with the rest of the poem, but it wouldn't really work so well for everything. If you're accustomed to writing in the moment, just using stream of consciousness instead of established patterns and schemes, you can write stuff and go back over it when you've finished.
I really like the way you write, and the words you use. The poem was very very cool. I especially enjoyed the last two lines. That was nice. Very nice. :D
Wow.
You write very interesting stuff. Your rythm isn't really well established, so it gave the poem a sort of choppy feel. That went pretty well wth the subject matter, but it's something to work on if you want to develop a more fluid pattern to some of your writing. It almost seemed as if you wanted to develop a rhyme scheme but didn't figure out the right words and speech patterns to make the rhyming work. Once again, this worked well with the rest of the poem, but it wouldn't really work so well for everything. If you're accustomed to writing in the moment, just using stream of consciousness instead of established patterns and schemes, you can write stuff and go back over it when you've finished.
I really like the way you write, and the words you use. The poem was very very cool. I especially enjoyed the last two lines. That was nice. Very nice. :D
4/21/2004 c1 33M.T. Stockton
Whew, what a trip. I loved it! So original, so dark. I'm a big fan of well-written snippets of insanity, and this is that. It's just so descriptive, you've created such vivid and strange images with this poem. I love the whole twisted-ball thing. It's just an all-around great work. Like another reviewer said, it does have a certain Tom Waits quality to it. Congrats, and keep writing.
33M.T. StocktonWhew, what a trip. I loved it! So original, so dark. I'm a big fan of well-written snippets of insanity, and this is that. It's just so descriptive, you've created such vivid and strange images with this poem. I love the whole twisted-ball thing. It's just an all-around great work. Like another reviewer said, it does have a certain Tom Waits quality to it. Congrats, and keep writing.
4/19/2004 c1 25JRVillers
Were it not for the word 'delirium' in the title, I would say you were jumping around too much. This is beautiful; your description is top-notch and fresh just as I saw with your other piece. It's like wonderful eye candy for me, and all this poetic eye candy takes to be great is meaning behind it (which I think this has).
Here is a link your poetry reminds me a little bit of: http:/w.officialtomwaits.com/music/m_rd_lyr.htm
(saying your poem reminds me of tom waits lyrics is high praise; he is my hero)
Read some of these lyrics, tell me what you think, and just know that the music is easily as good as the words.
And PS: You made me giddy today, with all of those nice reviews you gave me. Someone out there is reading *swoons*
Great job.
25JRVillersWere it not for the word 'delirium' in the title, I would say you were jumping around too much. This is beautiful; your description is top-notch and fresh just as I saw with your other piece. It's like wonderful eye candy for me, and all this poetic eye candy takes to be great is meaning behind it (which I think this has).
Here is a link your poetry reminds me a little bit of: http:/w.officialtomwaits.com/music/m_rd_lyr.htm
(saying your poem reminds me of tom waits lyrics is high praise; he is my hero)
Read some of these lyrics, tell me what you think, and just know that the music is easily as good as the words.
And PS: You made me giddy today, with all of those nice reviews you gave me. Someone out there is reading *swoons*
Great job.
3/4/2004 c1 16amethystdawn
You should pose this in Halloween. It's like you mushed up almost every single evil thing in the world into a well-made poem. Cool.
16amethystdawnYou should pose this in Halloween. It's like you mushed up almost every single evil thing in the world into a well-made poem. Cool.
2/21/2004 c1 74Etheral
WHOA! That's all i can say. Wonderful imagry, wonderful wording! Holy Crap I loved it! Rock On Dudette!
74EtheralWHOA! That's all i can say. Wonderful imagry, wonderful wording! Holy Crap I loved it! Rock On Dudette!
2/20/2004 c1 241Werewolf Nighteyes
Whoa... Dark again. You really did these kind of poems don't you? ^_^ Oh well. It's good, so you're definitely going on to my fav. authors list
241Werewolf NighteyesWhoa... Dark again. You really did these kind of poems don't you? ^_^ Oh well. It's good, so you're definitely going on to my fav. authors list