for Sex, Lies, and High School5/14/2004 c3 
5Generik
First of all, this is a good start. I like the first interaction between your characters.
Your story could use some work though. There's a lot of one line paragraphs and most of it is dialogue. Too keep a story interesting, you have to balance the dialogue and narration.
Other than that and grammar mistakes, good job. Good luck with the forthcoming chapters.
5GenerikFirst of all, this is a good start. I like the first interaction between your characters.
Your story could use some work though. There's a lot of one line paragraphs and most of it is dialogue. Too keep a story interesting, you have to balance the dialogue and narration.
Other than that and grammar mistakes, good job. Good luck with the forthcoming chapters.
5/13/2004 c3 Chookstar
Hey! Those 3 chapters were great. I like how you introduced all the guys and i hope to see more up soon.\
chookstar
Hey! Those 3 chapters were great. I like how you introduced all the guys and i hope to see more up soon.\
chookstar
5/13/2004 c3 Hexic
Hey, awesome story. I love it! Waiting for more lol
Hey, awesome story. I love it! Waiting for more lol
5/13/2004 c1 Kellom Kitty Kat
OMG... u no how mrs. smith dyed her hair, well i almost died laughing at this fucking piece of trash.
OMG... u no how mrs. smith dyed her hair, well i almost died laughing at this fucking piece of trash.
3/6/2004 c3 Nicki
I'm here to tell you DONT STOP!
you are definately not wasting your time with this story, I find it quite interesting and would love to see where it goes, but i can't if you stop writing it! I guarentee you people are reading it, just because the dont review doesnt mean they arent reading it. The world is filled with quite a few lazy people(myself sometimes being one of them..haha) but I really think you should continue! for me! it really isnt a waste of your time! Did i mention I really like your story?
I'm here to tell you DONT STOP!
you are definately not wasting your time with this story, I find it quite interesting and would love to see where it goes, but i can't if you stop writing it! I guarentee you people are reading it, just because the dont review doesnt mean they arent reading it. The world is filled with quite a few lazy people(myself sometimes being one of them..haha) but I really think you should continue! for me! it really isnt a waste of your time! Did i mention I really like your story?
3/6/2004 c3 Summas Angellove
Well, since you don't have email, I can't really tell you directly if you don't check your reviews. And no, your story is not crap. So far, you've done character introductions, but not much of a plot. But I can say that your characters are interesting, and having them interact would be fun to watch because they seem very different (e.g. Tia and Snipper). I personally am interested in what direction you're planning to take this story.
Email me!
Well, since you don't have email, I can't really tell you directly if you don't check your reviews. And no, your story is not crap. So far, you've done character introductions, but not much of a plot. But I can say that your characters are interesting, and having them interact would be fun to watch because they seem very different (e.g. Tia and Snipper). I personally am interested in what direction you're planning to take this story.
Email me!