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6/19/2004 c1 12Smiley Gurl 1019
Another gem. I can hear a melody as I read the words, and I think you are truly a talented poet/songwriter/thingy/whatever. Keep writing!
~Maddie~
6/5/2004 c1 9QuillKitten
You're word choice was amazing! Wow... It's strong and vivid, and you can feel the, well you can't feel i guess because you're anaesthetized, but it pulls you in and it hits you in the gut hard. Tearing more like. But anyway, the flow is unique and the punctuation really adds. Oh, btw, thanks for the review, I suppose you could say that was an "abstract representaion" of my feelings of love. The color was just an association with the object. Which maybe was too personal. I have to go read more of you're stuff now! bye.
3/17/2004 c1 335chainedfreedom
Forgot the flesh was loose and gone
-awesome line, sent shivers through my spine.
thanx for the review again.
and im gona read some more ;)
one thing: very creepy, i like's
2/27/2004 c1 5PainkillerPie
Heh, that was good. I can't criticize, you're surely a great poet. It could get you somewhere, I swear. Keep trying.
2/18/2004 c1 whyt forest
oh lovely. i'm drunk with emotion now. scant but adequate descriptions with meaningful words. very emotive. love the line "and i felt the breeze lay on my bones"

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