for Relation2/22/2004 c1 
292Fabian Cortez
This is good throughout; great descriptive terms and use of words. The end throws it slightly off for me as it seems slightly off beat with the rest. This doesn't detract from the message conveyed and the power of the piece though. It is still a very good poem.
WELL DONE
KEEP WRITING!
F.C
292Fabian CortezThis is good throughout; great descriptive terms and use of words. The end throws it slightly off for me as it seems slightly off beat with the rest. This doesn't detract from the message conveyed and the power of the piece though. It is still a very good poem.
WELL DONE
KEEP WRITING!
F.C
2/22/2004 c1 Angelic Hellraiser
This is very good and thanks for the review. I will have to fix that problem. Again thankyou and great poem.
This is very good and thanks for the review. I will have to fix that problem. Again thankyou and great poem.
2/22/2004 c1 112Jace1
this is good, why not try it again? poetry doesnt have to rhyme, or have any special format, and i think you could have a lot of things to say if you put it to a poem.. its like a song.. a story just has more details and complete sentences .. this poem says a lot, great job, and thank you for the review
112Jace1this is good, why not try it again? poetry doesnt have to rhyme, or have any special format, and i think you could have a lot of things to say if you put it to a poem.. its like a song.. a story just has more details and complete sentences .. this poem says a lot, great job, and thank you for the review
2/19/2004 c1 144Infinite Smiles
You did a wonderful job of transfering your emotions from the heart to the pen to the paper..oh well.. to the keyboard.. to the computer..to the internet. I like. I love the bit that you put in the summary..."Tell me what you think, if you have an opinion. If not, what's the use of a mind?" ..I found it highly amusing. Smile.
144Infinite SmilesYou did a wonderful job of transfering your emotions from the heart to the pen to the paper..oh well.. to the keyboard.. to the computer..to the internet. I like. I love the bit that you put in the summary..."Tell me what you think, if you have an opinion. If not, what's the use of a mind?" ..I found it highly amusing. Smile.
2/19/2004 c1 75Fast Food Fantasy
I love this poem, a lot like what i'm going through right now. I appreciate the review!
75Fast Food FantasyI love this poem, a lot like what i'm going through right now. I appreciate the review!
2/19/2004 c1 178FigureItOut
wow this is really good. It's awesome, I love the rhythm(sp?)
-hey thanx for reviewing!
178FigureItOutwow this is really good. It's awesome, I love the rhythm(sp?)
-hey thanx for reviewing!
2/18/2004 c1 74LordK
That was great! I really got the message from the poem. You communicated it really well. It was cool. I liked it a lot. That was really awesome!
74LordKThat was great! I really got the message from the poem. You communicated it really well. It was cool. I liked it a lot. That was really awesome!
2/18/2004 c1 10Crelian2202
"You say that you love me/and how can I disagree" Remove the 'and' I think it reads better with it gone. Other than that nicely done.
10Crelian2202"You say that you love me/and how can I disagree" Remove the 'and' I think it reads better with it gone. Other than that nicely done.