for A Shred of Hope4/16/2008 c10 
13XxDragon Princess NikkixX
Good to hear from you again! I'm sad you won't be continuing this but I completely understand all the reasons why you can't... looking forward to reading your new story =). And thank you so much for being so wonderful and devoted. You are amazing =)
13XxDragon Princess NikkixXGood to hear from you again! I'm sad you won't be continuing this but I completely understand all the reasons why you can't... looking forward to reading your new story =). And thank you so much for being so wonderful and devoted. You are amazing =)
4/16/2008 c10 Michelle Habibi
...Anna Torrin? You changed her name! But i'll still read it here on fictionpress and review ;)
-Michelle
...Anna Torrin? You changed her name! But i'll still read it here on fictionpress and review ;)
-Michelle
8/30/2006 c9 27ClassicTrick
O_O I think you're great.your writing still is greatthis story is great!~Classic Trick
27ClassicTrickO_O I think you're great.your writing still is greatthis story is great!~Classic Trick
7/7/2006 c9 6Medieval-Rogue
URGH! DAMN IT...sorry for the sailor mouth, but this story was starting to get good. I know, I know, you warned me. Heh.
It was a joy to read, despite it's sudden ending. It left hope in the air! Romance, friendship, and the foreboding feeling Adiya gives me. She DOES have an assassin father, after all. Hmm...I kind of wonder if she and Isaac will ...umm...find romance. heehee. It would work well.
The plot was fantastic, the characters were great, and I think I would definitely check out another story if you post it. Thanks for offering to read mine, I have only a few reviewers and I cherish them greatly. If you like the story and continue reading it (because I do update frequently; usually no more than a month, though lately I've been very quick with new chapters), then I will definitely love that as well.
Lovely story, even if it's one of those you chose not to finish. I understand completely, I have a bit of a bad habit of starting things and not finishing them.
~Cheers!~
6Medieval-RogueURGH! DAMN IT...sorry for the sailor mouth, but this story was starting to get good. I know, I know, you warned me. Heh.
It was a joy to read, despite it's sudden ending. It left hope in the air! Romance, friendship, and the foreboding feeling Adiya gives me. She DOES have an assassin father, after all. Hmm...I kind of wonder if she and Isaac will ...umm...find romance. heehee. It would work well.
The plot was fantastic, the characters were great, and I think I would definitely check out another story if you post it. Thanks for offering to read mine, I have only a few reviewers and I cherish them greatly. If you like the story and continue reading it (because I do update frequently; usually no more than a month, though lately I've been very quick with new chapters), then I will definitely love that as well.
Lovely story, even if it's one of those you chose not to finish. I understand completely, I have a bit of a bad habit of starting things and not finishing them.
~Cheers!~
7/7/2006 c8 Medieval-Rogue
Oh good... I had kind of wondered whether they would have the sense not to go straight to Kellya. That was intresting...I wish I knew what the Altiege were. So glad that Kai's family and everyone got away.
Urg...one more chapter, and then no more. Despite it's flaws, I really do like and enjoy this story...it's a pity.
Oh good... I had kind of wondered whether they would have the sense not to go straight to Kellya. That was intresting...I wish I knew what the Altiege were. So glad that Kai's family and everyone got away.
Urg...one more chapter, and then no more. Despite it's flaws, I really do like and enjoy this story...it's a pity.
7/7/2006 c7 Medieval-Rogue
M...that was a very nice beginning. Her changing, thinking he's asleep. Heehee, "He woke up with a devious smile' was cute and funny.
Then there was the swimming...and the nthe foreboding sense that followed with the sunset. Blagh. Something bad is definitely going to happen.
M...that was a very nice beginning. Her changing, thinking he's asleep. Heehee, "He woke up with a devious smile' was cute and funny.
Then there was the swimming...and the nthe foreboding sense that followed with the sunset. Blagh. Something bad is definitely going to happen.
7/7/2006 c6 Medieval-Rogue
*smiles* I forgot to mention...I like the 'marks' thing, instead of saying 'spell', you created 'marks' ...it's very nice, very unique.
AW...cute kisses, though the details could have been more gradual to increase the emotions.
Total cuteness. And who doesn't love swordplay?
*smiles* I forgot to mention...I like the 'marks' thing, instead of saying 'spell', you created 'marks' ...it's very nice, very unique.
AW...cute kisses, though the details could have been more gradual to increase the emotions.
Total cuteness. And who doesn't love swordplay?
7/7/2006 c5 Medieval-Rogue
MWAHAHAHAHA! They succumb to PASSION is what! *giggles* That was a cute ending, a good chapter filled with interesting song verses and perhaps it has just been too long for me to remember a child's capabilities, but I really thought it was at three that a kid could start talking in somewhat sentences...because three years old is about the time I started remembering things...not many, but things nonetheless.
Strong emotions, and interesting truths. Hmm...Nice Chappie!
MWAHAHAHAHA! They succumb to PASSION is what! *giggles* That was a cute ending, a good chapter filled with interesting song verses and perhaps it has just been too long for me to remember a child's capabilities, but I really thought it was at three that a kid could start talking in somewhat sentences...because three years old is about the time I started remembering things...not many, but things nonetheless.
Strong emotions, and interesting truths. Hmm...Nice Chappie!
7/7/2006 c4 Medieval-Rogue
Ah...she almost drowned...I almost drowned...like 3 times when I was a kid... I know how to swim, though I daresay anyone who gets knocked out isn't going to be able to swim even if they're an Olympic diver.
Hmm...Kai. More detail would have been nice, both when he rescued her, on the fight, and on her emotions afterward. But alas, no more updates, so my advice is for naught. Heh. That was fun to say.
Ah...she almost drowned...I almost drowned...like 3 times when I was a kid... I know how to swim, though I daresay anyone who gets knocked out isn't going to be able to swim even if they're an Olympic diver.
Hmm...Kai. More detail would have been nice, both when he rescued her, on the fight, and on her emotions afterward. But alas, no more updates, so my advice is for naught. Heh. That was fun to say.
7/7/2006 c3 Medieval-Rogue
Heh, thank you for telling me you don't update this story...I actually did take a look at your author page before hand, but I think I skipped down to read the story before I read your little entry on it mentioning how old it was and how long it had been since you updated. Indeed, if you hadn't, I'd probably be rattling on about what areas could be improved. There's few, but enough that I would want to tell you. It's a habit of mine, in reviews...I'm polite about it though. It's only meant to help.
It's lovely that Kai is going to finally see Amira again...a little wierd that he was 'attracted' to her as friend or more when he was four and she two, but still...understandable I'd say, and unique. It will be twice as interesting to see their reunion, considering she doesn't even remember him. I have a funny feeling someone is going to get hurt though, and my funny feeling says it's Kai's sister.
Heh, thank you for telling me you don't update this story...I actually did take a look at your author page before hand, but I think I skipped down to read the story before I read your little entry on it mentioning how old it was and how long it had been since you updated. Indeed, if you hadn't, I'd probably be rattling on about what areas could be improved. There's few, but enough that I would want to tell you. It's a habit of mine, in reviews...I'm polite about it though. It's only meant to help.
It's lovely that Kai is going to finally see Amira again...a little wierd that he was 'attracted' to her as friend or more when he was four and she two, but still...understandable I'd say, and unique. It will be twice as interesting to see their reunion, considering she doesn't even remember him. I have a funny feeling someone is going to get hurt though, and my funny feeling says it's Kai's sister.
7/7/2006 c2 Medieval-Rogue
Ah, I do see what you mean. "Immature" isn't the word I would use, but I can understand your point of view. It does have places to improve on, but for two years back, it's still an accomplished piece so far.
I know sort of what it's like. I beg you forgive me for it, too, because I've had my story on this site for two and a half years, I've been writing it for three...and well...my goal for this summer is to edit / rewrite the first fourteen chapters, the ones I deem that need it. As the story goes on, my writing imrpoves, but I still don't want the crappy chapters up. I have edited the first seven so far, except one of them I'm going to work more on and I'm thinking of adding a prologue. I know the feeling; it made me cringe to edit some of those first chapters.
Anyway. I believe I will still read this. All knowledge is worth having, and reading this will definitely give me something to do. The plot is interesting, as is the foreshadowing. Onwards!
~Cheers~
PS - I'm not worried if you update or not, I've read plenty of stories that authors end up dropping or too busy in life to update.
Ah, I do see what you mean. "Immature" isn't the word I would use, but I can understand your point of view. It does have places to improve on, but for two years back, it's still an accomplished piece so far.
I know sort of what it's like. I beg you forgive me for it, too, because I've had my story on this site for two and a half years, I've been writing it for three...and well...my goal for this summer is to edit / rewrite the first fourteen chapters, the ones I deem that need it. As the story goes on, my writing imrpoves, but I still don't want the crappy chapters up. I have edited the first seven so far, except one of them I'm going to work more on and I'm thinking of adding a prologue. I know the feeling; it made me cringe to edit some of those first chapters.
Anyway. I believe I will still read this. All knowledge is worth having, and reading this will definitely give me something to do. The plot is interesting, as is the foreshadowing. Onwards!
~Cheers~
PS - I'm not worried if you update or not, I've read plenty of stories that authors end up dropping or too busy in life to update.
7/6/2006 c1 Medieval-Rogue
*frowns / pouts in sadness*
Gah...sometimes, one would rather be proved wrong when taking precautions. I'm sure this is one of those times. i guess she took the niece away without her sister's consent because she suspected danger that the others didn't... If I were her, I would rather be proved wrong than have my sister and brother in law, my king and queen, die.
Very good beginning, and if I wasn't so tired, I would read more. Alas, that will wait until tomorrow. Amira is a fine name, and I love Arabic culture, I truly do. Obsessed is a more accurate term, I guess. ^_^
~Cheers!~
*frowns / pouts in sadness*
Gah...sometimes, one would rather be proved wrong when taking precautions. I'm sure this is one of those times. i guess she took the niece away without her sister's consent because she suspected danger that the others didn't... If I were her, I would rather be proved wrong than have my sister and brother in law, my king and queen, die.
Very good beginning, and if I wasn't so tired, I would read more. Alas, that will wait until tomorrow. Amira is a fine name, and I love Arabic culture, I truly do. Obsessed is a more accurate term, I guess. ^_^
~Cheers!~
9/9/2004 c9 10HellsGuardian 44
hey i really liked it and i see what you mean about spaceing and ty for reading my story keep it up :p
10HellsGuardian 44hey i really liked it and i see what you mean about spaceing and ty for reading my story keep it up :p
9/5/2004 c3 17A Lady
I really like this story . . . . It's got potential. Could you please review my poem "Fire"?
17A LadyI really like this story . . . . It's got potential. Could you please review my poem "Fire"?
9/4/2004 c9 36FantasyWriter923
This story was really good. The only thing that confused me was in the first chapter when you wrote: she looked at the sleeping girl in her arms, when she got back she would be in a lot of trouble, when she got back. What confused me was why you said when she got back twice. But, other than that this was a really good read and I can't wait for more. Thank you for reviewing Becca's Diary. I really appreciated it.
36FantasyWriter923This story was really good. The only thing that confused me was in the first chapter when you wrote: she looked at the sleeping girl in her arms, when she got back she would be in a lot of trouble, when she got back. What confused me was why you said when she got back twice. But, other than that this was a really good read and I can't wait for more. Thank you for reviewing Becca's Diary. I really appreciated it.