for The World in the Eyes of a Teenage Cynic11/2/2004 c1 UnsungbutWritten
I liked the overall tone of this. You've executed it well, and it's a serious and yet funny poem. The reptition also works well; well done.
I liked the overall tone of this. You've executed it well, and it's a serious and yet funny poem. The reptition also works well; well done.
4/24/2004 c1 
138Lina Inverse
Change the rating. Now. Rating something higher just because it refers to homosexuality is, in a sense, a little bit homophobic. It's like saying that it's not okay for young people to be exposed to homosexuality.
138Lina InverseChange the rating. Now. Rating something higher just because it refers to homosexuality is, in a sense, a little bit homophobic. It's like saying that it's not okay for young people to be exposed to homosexuality.
4/11/2004 c1 48Silent Laughter
Ha! That was good. Very cynical, but kind of funny as a result. You managed to make America look so crappy in one piece of poetry... plus you were completely right. I wish I could do that... ::sigh:: Good show, good show. ^^
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48Silent LaughterHa! That was good. Very cynical, but kind of funny as a result. You managed to make America look so crappy in one piece of poetry... plus you were completely right. I wish I could do that... ::sigh:: Good show, good show. ^^
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4/9/2004 c1 10Violet Blues
That was beautiful! And the reference to Britney Spears was pretty funny!
-Violet*~
10Violet BluesThat was beautiful! And the reference to Britney Spears was pretty funny!
-Violet*~
3/25/2004 c1 7Stolen Nametag
That poem is... creative. I loved it. It reminds me of this one time when I was chilled back in my room channelling my thoughts to think about mass destruction, when suddenly out of nowhere I just started thinking, "There's one hilarious fucking crack on the wall that I have never noticed before." So for the sake of all that was good and holy, I decided to fix the crack, then cut myself a few times as a reward. It was all good and stuff, but hey, what can I say? I like being me. That's how I get through as another 'speck of dirt on this golf ball called earth (311)'. I'm the little masochist that can... boo-ya!
7Stolen NametagThat poem is... creative. I loved it. It reminds me of this one time when I was chilled back in my room channelling my thoughts to think about mass destruction, when suddenly out of nowhere I just started thinking, "There's one hilarious fucking crack on the wall that I have never noticed before." So for the sake of all that was good and holy, I decided to fix the crack, then cut myself a few times as a reward. It was all good and stuff, but hey, what can I say? I like being me. That's how I get through as another 'speck of dirt on this golf ball called earth (311)'. I'm the little masochist that can... boo-ya!
3/15/2004 c1 10whirling dervish
Heh heh, love the Monty Python reference in the second verse ^_^. I also really like the kind of stream-of-consciousness tilt that your poem has. I don't want to just repeat what everyone else said (well, actually, i do, so...), but this did sound poignantly familiar...it reminded me greatly of the sarcastic debates/rants/inditements that my friends and i all babble on about during lunch. I think you really captured the mood of frustrated anger in teens quite well!
10whirling dervishHeh heh, love the Monty Python reference in the second verse ^_^. I also really like the kind of stream-of-consciousness tilt that your poem has. I don't want to just repeat what everyone else said (well, actually, i do, so...), but this did sound poignantly familiar...it reminded me greatly of the sarcastic debates/rants/inditements that my friends and i all babble on about during lunch. I think you really captured the mood of frustrated anger in teens quite well!
3/15/2004 c1 Story-Teller's Aide
that was a really good poem. i particularly enjoyed everything about britney spears in relation to gay marriage.
that was a really good poem. i particularly enjoyed everything about britney spears in relation to gay marriage.
3/14/2004 c1 103Anaiya Illyria
i know what it's like to feel angry and frustrated at the world. i tend to take mine out in a more negative way though. I'm glad you've found a way to deal with yours.
103Anaiya Illyriai know what it's like to feel angry and frustrated at the world. i tend to take mine out in a more negative way though. I'm glad you've found a way to deal with yours.
3/9/2004 c1 Tamara
Well, unlike many I wont exactly say "so true, your right, so true" but I will say that this was a wonderful piece of work. The slightly random stanza was great here, it made me feel like you were opening a highschoolers mind of all the things they think about when a teacher is talking. :)
Well, unlike many I wont exactly say "so true, your right, so true" but I will say that this was a wonderful piece of work. The slightly random stanza was great here, it made me feel like you were opening a highschoolers mind of all the things they think about when a teacher is talking. :)
2/28/2004 c1 Jagged Broken Crosses
Ah, so true. Very well captured. (Being a teenager myself, I can say that ;) Not much else to say, really. This is a good piece.
Ah, so true. Very well captured. (Being a teenager myself, I can say that ;) Not much else to say, really. This is a good piece.
2/27/2004 c1 30g21lto
Yep, I can relate. I also must deal with still being in high school...grr. But I'm graduating this June, so it's OK. I too find President Bush to be an annoying git. The mention of steroids in his State of the Union Address kind of threw me off, too. Anyway, the poem is funny and I enjoyed it. Good job!
30g21ltoYep, I can relate. I also must deal with still being in high school...grr. But I'm graduating this June, so it's OK. I too find President Bush to be an annoying git. The mention of steroids in his State of the Union Address kind of threw me off, too. Anyway, the poem is funny and I enjoyed it. Good job!
2/25/2004 c1 74LordK
Wow! Your poetry is astounding. That's deep, and you have some interesting opinons. It's nice to point out the paradoxes and contradictions that we in America make. On the other hand, personally I don't agree, but that's not the point. Great ideas, absolutely fabulous and well expressed. You really have a knack for this poetry stuff!
74LordKWow! Your poetry is astounding. That's deep, and you have some interesting opinons. It's nice to point out the paradoxes and contradictions that we in America make. On the other hand, personally I don't agree, but that's not the point. Great ideas, absolutely fabulous and well expressed. You really have a knack for this poetry stuff!