for If I were2/29/2004 c1 
43lronMaiden
that sounds like it has a lot of meaning and depth to it - but it just doesnt have that poetic ring to it. Perhaps if you reordered and changed your words it would. On the other hand, if it's not meant to BE poetry, it's quite good!
ps. if you get the time and if you want to, please check out some of my own work. Thanx!
43lronMaidenthat sounds like it has a lot of meaning and depth to it - but it just doesnt have that poetic ring to it. Perhaps if you reordered and changed your words it would. On the other hand, if it's not meant to BE poetry, it's quite good!
ps. if you get the time and if you want to, please check out some of my own work. Thanx!